Death's Eyes

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Staring into his eyes,
Almost completely black,
Hearing my hearts cries,
Waiting for the attack.

Almost completely black,
Around us is the night,
Waiting for the attack,
The one I would not fight.

Around us is the night,
Watching the beautiful creature,
The one I would not fight,
He owns not one ugly feature.

Watching the beautiful creature,
He leans in for a kiss,
He owns not one ugly feature,
For this I will miss.

He leans in for a kiss,
Hearing my hearts cries,
For this I will miss,
Staring into his eyes.





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Egyptiangirl13 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 25, 2010 at 8:13 am
wow i love your writing style!!! its so unique and interesting!!! i really love the effect of this poem-its sort of mysterious and cold but still so awesome!!! plus you picked the perfect pic. to go w/ it!! please check out some of my work it would mean a lot. I think that you might like 'stay for tomorrow' and 'words unspoken'. it would mean a lot if you would ckeck out my work!!:)
 
REMi93 said...
Jun. 7, 2010 at 11:20 pm
I love this poem. It's cool how you repeat lines but it doesn't feel like repetition at all. It has a beautiful flow and serene power.
 
CountryGothic replied...
Jun. 8, 2010 at 6:37 pm
Thank you so much!
 
chastity said...
May 25, 2010 at 1:03 pm
wow this is so great!!! i wish i were ths good
 
CountryGothic replied...
Jun. 2, 2010 at 9:56 pm
Thank you, I'm so glad you liked it!
 
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