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I been walking to long down this path
and truely it seems endless
No shortcuts are there to take, I cant do the math
Im looking for whom i might be needing the most
I cant find the exit,, im lost
I see shadows, its not you its your ghost
IF you are here .. please stay
I want you to be with me night and day
Together we can find the way
You told me all you know to me you ganna teach
In my mind while you talk, I picture us together on the beach
Your words to me are a holy speech
Dont look at me by my age
In life its just a page
I listen to you when you talk, watch me while I dance on the stage
Ill clam your rage, Ill lock all your anger in a cage..
In your eyes, I might seem young
My heart doesnt beat, its calls your name, it just rung!
Dont say I cant love.. be a fair judge
Did I add to your life taste? I put on some fudge
On my cheeck there lays a tear
It desolves as soon as your voice I hear
This will come to an end
But let our hearts remain straight, dont let yours bend
And one day we both will be "gone with the wind"
Letters and notes no longer Ill send
Ill look at your eyes, Deeper, so dont blink
Let me of you forever think
This feeling to you isnt so new
You've had it, not once but a few
Dont let me be your gum, when it lose its flavor you no longer chew
In life, Hapiness is all we would wanna taste
And there isnt time to waste!
Lets forget all we have faced
Imagine that its only the two of us on earth!
Today starts our journey.. It's its birth!



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BurnHem said...
Nov. 22, 2010 at 4:28 pm:
You know what I enjoyed the most(?) That this poem is long enough to help me ilstruate a picture and see the meaning of it! It's beyond good! Do you take any classes to help you in writing? Like advanced english class if you're in school? If you dont, then you should because its very clear that you have a gift!
 
Shahed replied...
Nov. 23, 2010 at 4:38 pm :
I really appricate that.. Yes, actually I take a creative writing class I have a 100 ..  :)
 
BurnHem replied...
Nov. 26, 2010 at 11:54 am :
And I am not surprised!! Again, I just finished reading this poem all over again and I realized that it's honestly just great cant find better words!
 
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_Elsy_ said...
Jun. 23, 2010 at 5:19 pm:
Beautiful, and the ryhming actually flows together rather then some awkward poems.
 
Shahed replied...
Jun. 24, 2010 at 11:55 am :

Yea sometimes the rhyming isnt that good in some poems.. But I try :)

Thank you!!

 
_Elsy_ replied...
Jun. 24, 2010 at 12:01 pm :
your welcome
 
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TrueLoveWaits This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jun. 20, 2010 at 1:47 pm:
this poem is my favoriteee (so far xp) i love all the comparisons you make and the way you phrase things. it's so beautiful and really conveys the feelings you have on the subject your writing about. and thank you sooooo much for reading all my poems :) all your comments made me feel soooo good about myself and just made my day. once again, thank you soo much!! keep writingg!! :D
 
Shahed replied...
Jun. 20, 2010 at 7:48 pm :
Aww thank you! Dont thank me for reading them .. they were awesome you have no idea how I really enjoyed each and everyone of them .. and Im so glad you like it :))
 
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Shadows said...
Jun. 7, 2010 at 8:53 am:
The meaning is clear. I said it two times and ill say it again... You have talent and thats what brings me in!
 
Shahed replied...
Jun. 7, 2010 at 12:54 pm :
Aww thanks! Since you dont have an account I wonder how you heard about my poems? , again, thanks for stopping by :)
 
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Joseph123 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
May 25, 2010 at 2:24 pm:
I really like how the poem starts with the walking down the path, how you incorporate your feelings with someone else, and then end the poem with, "Today starts our journey...It's its birth," because it's reviving. 
 
Shahed replied...
May 25, 2010 at 3:44 pm :
You know there are very few comments that show how people understood this poem, thank you so much for commenting!
 
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noelleism said...
Mar. 3, 2010 at 9:12 am:
It kinda reminds me of a poem that I have. I love lines 12, 14a, 16. They remind me of my poem called understand me. I haven't posted it yet.
 
Shahed replied...
Mar. 4, 2010 at 4:55 pm :
Im ganna love it when you publish it.. thank you for reading and commenting :) so much!
 
noelleism replied...
Mar. 8, 2010 at 7:46 am :
Your so welcome. :)
 
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MONICA said...
Feb. 21, 2010 at 5:36 pm:
Aww dats the sweetest poem i have ever heard!
keep it up shahed ;)
 
Shahed replied...
Feb. 21, 2010 at 5:45 pm :
thank you mon ;) im glad u liked it
 
h3arts4ever replied...
Feb. 27, 2010 at 1:04 am :
that's adorable! it's truely is the sweeetest poem ever!
 
Shahed replied...
Feb. 27, 2010 at 8:48 am :
aww.. thanks!!
 
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jephte15 said...
Feb. 21, 2010 at 5:29 pm:
wow thats good
 
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