Double-Edged Sword

February 5, 2010
By firelioness BRONZE, Okemos, Michigan
firelioness BRONZE, Okemos, Michigan
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Naïve and a fool I used to be
a poor victim of love’s charm
blinded, utterly unable to see
realizing too late the extent of its harm
I was only one of countless prey
for love’s beauty is an intoxication
so alluring it cannot be kept at bay
filling the senses with ineffably delightful sensation
With an irresistibly sweet melody
the music of passion draws victims in headfirst
once immersed there is no remedy
thus a seraphic blessing turns into a fatal curse
What seems so benevolent before
now turns on me with the force of a thousand angry seas
casting me into the depths of vulnerability with no oars
dashing me against the rocks of pain like a relentless beast
Only now do I feel the sting of its ruthless dagger
piercing me so deeply that I can hardly breath
Head reeling, I can only stagger
slowly feeling my icy heart seize
Such is the fate
of all who fall out of love with love
the innocuous pulchritude will never again sate
those forced by heartbreak to become tough
Naïve and a fool I used to be
but now I defer to the ultimate lord
a lord who taught me to heed
that it, love, will always be a double-edged sword


The author's comments:
I was really kind of surprised at how emotional this poem turned out to be. Suggestions for improvement are definitely welcome. :)

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kressbe BRONZE said...
on Feb. 18 2010 at 6:55 pm
kressbe BRONZE, Mequon, Wisconsin
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also amazing slant rhyme! You're really good at that.

kressbe BRONZE said...
on Feb. 18 2010 at 6:54 pm
kressbe BRONZE, Mequon, Wisconsin
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Gave me chills!

It was great! One suggestion: spell breathe with an e at the end... and yes I realize that's editing, not a suggestion but it was so good I don't have any suggestions to make!


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