As the world turns

February 1, 2010
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As the world turns,
as it starts to shimmer,
the shimmer dims and becomes a glimmer.
And that glimmer is the most important thing of all,
because it means the darkness has yet to fall.
It means there is still hope, peace, and love left in our world,
and it also means that smiles still rain down from above.

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jonas_chic899 said...
May 3, 2010 at 7:54 am
hey that was reallllllll nicce ^^ i loved it so so much!!
Muffy replied...
May 3, 2010 at 4:36 pm
thanks, lol. It means alot.
ZAVERY said...
Apr. 9, 2010 at 7:06 pm
The same as your username! Haha! Love this work you wrote!
astheworldturns replied...
Apr. 9, 2010 at 8:08 pm
Thank you so much!
Nikiblue said...
Feb. 19, 2010 at 8:35 pm
It was ok. My suggestion would be not to make the sentences so long. Also in the beginning I would have worded it as:
As the world turns,
It starts to shimmer.
The shimmer dims,
Becoming a glimmer.
BobbysGirl replied...
Apr. 9, 2010 at 8:35 pm

yeah im with Niki...But i still like it! good job! :}


Schnoodlebear replied...
May 15, 2010 at 11:12 am

I liked it. I tend t agree with the other comment. Myabe the sentences should be a bit shorter but other that that is was amazing!


Muffy replied...
May 15, 2010 at 1:41 pm
Awesome, thanks, y'all!
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