Foolish Clowns

January 16, 2010
By cate allen BRONZE, Fairfield, Connecticut
cate allen BRONZE, Fairfield, Connecticut
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A painted on mask
like a clown
it fools you all

because when i frown it stays the same
and when i cry my face stays dry
its plastered on tight
secured

keeping me safe
keeping me away from you
keeping me thoughtless
keeping my mask on

because when someone see's behind that mask..
what are the going to see?
me.

The author's comments:
I write poems sometimes, in the moment, when i feel a certain emotion and i want to release it. This poem is a feeling i had one time, it's not something that i made up, it's real.

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on Jan. 31 2010 at 8:42 am
Shirley_R_K SILVER, Liberty, South Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
But sanctify Christ as Lord in your hearts, always being ready to make a defense to everyone who asks you to give an account for the hope that is in you, yet with gentleness and reverence.
-1 Peter 3:15

The first stanza is choppy, the rest seems pretty good

Cate Allen said...
on Jan. 28 2010 at 2:42 pm
thank you, is there any specific lines i need to work on?

on Jan. 28 2010 at 12:59 pm
Shirley_R_K SILVER, Liberty, South Carolina
9 articles 0 photos 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
But sanctify Christ as Lord in your hearts, always being ready to make a defense to everyone who asks you to give an account for the hope that is in you, yet with gentleness and reverence.
-1 Peter 3:15

Good job, I would work on flow a bit, and in the second to last line, it should be they


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