Foolish Clowns

January 16, 2010
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A painted on mask
like a clown
it fools you all

because when i frown it stays the same
and when i cry my face stays dry
its plastered on tight

keeping me safe
keeping me away from you
keeping me thoughtless
keeping my mask on

because when someone see's behind that mask..
what are the going to see?

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Shirley_R said...
Jan. 28, 2010 at 12:59 pm
Good job, I would work on flow a bit, and in the second to last line, it should be they
Cate Allen replied...
Jan. 28, 2010 at 2:42 pm
thank you, is there any specific lines i need to work on?
Shirley_R replied...
Jan. 31, 2010 at 8:42 am
The first stanza is choppy, the rest seems pretty good
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