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By MICHELLE D., Watertown, MA
Late at night, the entire world at peace.
Yet I am wide awake with no peace inside, because of you
The music is low, the room dark.
The only light burns from a candle, lit in memory of you
It, like my love for you, will burn forever strong.
My life has gone on to include everyone, but you
Have drifted from my life, your decision,
not mine.
Times are fast, but drag on indefinitely.
The exhaustion, physical and emotional,
only remind me
Of the strength once given by you,
now forever lost.
The infrequent, but everlasting, times of solitude.
The music and me.
The only company is the fire, that burns
In my heart, Where I am allowed
only memories of you
Memories that haunt and remind me
Of what I can no longer have
Your love, made me strong a strength
I carried into all I did.
A love I would have always returned
With open ease yet intense meaning.
And still you think this is how it must be
You and then the fire and me.
This piece has also been published in Teen Ink's monthly print magazine.
KumKiiMoo!!Hey!! Thanks for the comments you typed on one my poems.. lol and your poems are really good. i like your poems too!!
Brutal_AnticsVery well sculpted, did not over exagerate at all. Simplicity is key. You took a very intense topic and hit all the points without rambling on. You did a beautiful job and chose your words carefully; the entire passage flowed. Every word connected with the sentence and thus the entire piece meshed very well. GREAT WORK...looking forward to your next piece.
I loved it. and as GASP134 said, "Losing is hard. But losing what you never had and wished for is harder." (I would know.) great job!!
jordann_lil_guhoh. my god. this is an amazing poem,
it makes me think of this guy...
:'(
you are a wonderful writer.
niki <3 said...
Jun. 17 at 1:27 am:
Jun. 17 at 1:27 am:
i realy liked this poem it applied alot to a friend of mine. im sure she would also like this poem. u have talen t.keep writing
hey, that was amazing. you have really got sum talent. the ending is the powerful bit and i think it is great. the emotion that was put into this and then described just rite was really great.
keep writing!!
if ou have any free time, could u check out my stuff and if you can critisize, be my guest!!
Kiersten
awww :( That is so sad. i can totally relate to that.
it was well written with deep emotions! love it
<3loved said...
Jun. 3 at 2:40 am:
Jun. 3 at 2:40 am:
girl ive been through this! this is an amazing poem!! it describes my feelings to a te!! gooood job!!!
<3
hi!luv ur style!! i also write poetry1 except mine i ryme.
you did really good!:):):):) and rember to think positive too!!!!!!!!
MariaMarieI really love this! It reminds me so much of...well, something i know is happening right now with one of my friends and something I'm afraid is going to happen with me. It's something I would write about- but never would have wrote it this way... I love your style!!! And the way it's all fit in.. an amazing picture.
Writer4lifegirl, you touched my heart. i luv your lines. i luv your last line. the best i ever heard.
keep up the good work.
It's funny how one can easily have to rely on their last line to deliver an impact. That happens to me a lot, and this poem almost does that. Still, although it is yet another poem focusing too much on regret of a deprivation of love, I am well impacted and impressed. Good job. Not one of those universally speaking poems, but its good.
Your words Make the title even better! Eyecatcher!
babyface :) said...
Feb. 19 at 5:34 pm:
Feb. 19 at 5:34 pm:
dang girl, you definitely have some talent here. It really shines through in this poem. keep up the good work :)
chelly123 said...
Jan. 27 at 10:14 pm:
Jan. 27 at 10:14 pm:
i really liked this poem. i could relate to it and it was very emotionally good.
PRLCBpride2010 said...
Dec. 3, 2008 at 6:22 pm:
Dec. 3, 2008 at 6:22 pm:
I like this poem...it makes me think about the people I have lost in my life that meant the most to me....you did a great job.
joannie said...
Nov. 3, 2008 at 11:32 pm:
Nov. 3, 2008 at 11:32 pm:
wow that poem is great! good job i love the words also you chosed to pick
GASP134 said...
Oct. 2, 2008 at 12:03 am:
Oct. 2, 2008 at 12:03 am:
This poem is amazing. I sometimes feel the same way. Losing is hard. But losing what you never had and wished for is harder.
secretlover24 said...
Sept. 14, 2008 at 6:53 pm:
Sept. 14, 2008 at 6:53 pm:
this is beautiful. i never thought someone could describe so many feelings and such beauty and pain into one little poem. i will always think about this. thank you for sharing your talents.
neslyn08 said...
Aug. 13, 2008 at 8:12 pm:
Aug. 13, 2008 at 8:12 pm:
thats exactly how i
feel,its nice to know
someone feels the same.
peace|
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