The Roller Coaster This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine.


I step into the car

a stomach flutter

a thought of regret

The bar comes down with a thud

The climb starts its way

creaking and climbing

bemoaning our fates

"I want to get off!" my whole being screams

Over the hill we go with a crack and a whoosh





and rushing

clattering and


and then rest,

Tick - tick - tick-

The climb starts again

a heart flutter

and a whistle

and in one breath we dive

into the curve -




and back down

The wheels start grinding and turning

a gasp and


We stop

It's over

- and back into line ...

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.

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HereSheIsThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
May 6 at 12:18 pm
You have perfectly captured the roller coaster feeling
MadiHatter192 said...
Apr. 7, 2015 at 2:39 pm
Great use of action verbs. I really liked this.
Brian110 said...
Nov. 7, 2014 at 8:35 am
The ending realy rapped the whole thing up and showed how the terifiying thrill of a rolercoaster is scarry but that thrill just drives you back for more.
Logan said...
Mar. 11, 2013 at 10:19 am
Nice job!!
Malanie said...
Nov. 1, 2012 at 8:39 am
Wow, this captures what it's like to ride the lovely rollercoasters. I love this poem.
just my opinion said...
Mar. 23, 2011 at 1:17 pm
i think it wasnt so grand and i couldve done a more awesumer job...duh
simple reply replied...
Sept. 14, 2011 at 10:16 pm
I loved it keep up da great wrk boo
jobajfnh said...
Jan. 15, 2009 at 6:52 pm
its ok abit bleak
dgxxv said...
Dec. 4, 2008 at 4:02 pm
i like men
Bueno replied...
Apr. 4, 2010 at 7:23 pm
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