In Her Eyes This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine.

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   I killed a girl today I want to tell

you why I did it Nobody knew her

Maybe they did but they didn't care I

used to watch her a lot She was so

pretty I wanted to be her See if

anybody notices she's gone She's not

really gone though Just her soul not

her body Not her face not her hair

That's the only thing that matters She

had very nice hair I think I'll try it

on Her eyes are dark GREEN But they

aren't here anymore They're mine I

think I'll try those on too She had

whispered when she died Her lips formed

the words "Thank you" I made them do

that It's healthy to die Her life was

short and sweet It tasted good But I

don't want to be her anymore I want to

dream I'm going to bed now




This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.






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jordann_lil_guh said...
Jul. 21, 2009 at 5:57 pm
interesting.
 
Kayla1115 replied...
Oct. 24, 2011 at 9:13 am
Well, first off i would love to commend you on the fact that it wasn't cliche, in which most poetic people don't really write about murder.  Although your line breaks are awfully confusing to understand, I think you should re-edit, to make it a little bit more catchy.  Otherwise it's quite different and diverse than any other poem i have ever read.
 
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