i love it :)

this is great. i love the flow of it. i almost got lost in it.

keep writing! =)

~mimi

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I think you really have the rhyming scheme going great, and that's something I could never do, so congrats! However, I think your description says it all: "yet another case... when will this end?" and in response, it won't. There are thousands of poems like this, and they are all cliched.

If you play with the phrases "you'll never be mine" and "til the end of time," you could perhaps present a different, if perhaps more literal, way of looking at the disguise. As it stands, however, it's a fabulous poem, but unable to be picked out from thousands just like it.

I must say, though, it is a very well-written poem. Good job!