It's Love

September 20, 2009
By Cruzer SILVER, Paramus, New Jersey
Cruzer SILVER, Paramus, New Jersey
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I wait everyday
For you to pass my way
But when you finally do
I have nothing to say.

I always check both sides
For you to grace my eyes
But when you finally do
I fall behind my guise.

Why then do I bother, everyday?
Why can't I keep this crush at bay?
Why must I live in disarray
And pray for these feelings to just go away?

Because it's love and it can't be tamed;
I'll sit here and take all the blame
For waiting and watching ‘til the end of time,
Even though you'll never be mine.



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on Nov. 24 2009 at 5:51 pm
Atlantis PLATINUM, Naylor, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
Because we are all looking for the complete definition of love (Beau Sia)

i love it :)

mimi2.0 BRONZE said...
on Nov. 24 2009 at 5:30 pm
mimi2.0 BRONZE, Fremont, California
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Favorite Quote:
"If you really want it, then you gotta try for it. IF your hyped, the put it on the field"
"Marching band not only shows my love for music, it shows my love for everything around me."

this is great. i love the flow of it. i almost got lost in it.

keep writing! =)

~mimi

angier GOLD said...
on Nov. 24 2009 at 3:17 pm
angier GOLD, Centerville ,Pa, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
"All you need is love. But a little chocolate now and then doesn't hurt. "

I love it ...Check out my work....I think you would like it !!!

EdytD SILVER said...
on Oct. 19 2009 at 7:13 pm
EdytD SILVER, Livingston, New Jersey
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I think you really have the rhyming scheme going great, and that's something I could never do, so congrats! However, I think your description says it all: "yet another case... when will this end?" and in response, it won't. There are thousands of poems like this, and they are all cliched.

If you play with the phrases "you'll never be mine" and "til the end of time," you could perhaps present a different, if perhaps more literal, way of looking at the disguise. As it stands, however, it's a fabulous poem, but unable to be picked out from thousands just like it.

I must say, though, it is a very well-written poem. Good job!


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