Take Me Back

August 27, 2009
By IrisGF DIAMOND, Birmingham, Alabama
IrisGF DIAMOND, Birmingham, Alabama
55 articles 0 photos 5 comments

Take me back
To when I only wore dresses
With ribbons around my
Back
Take me back
To when Popsicle stains
Edged the sides of my lips
It’s a fact
That every day people wonder
What might have been
And then
They want to go
Back
Back to
Long summer days and winter nights
Waiting for snow
Waiting for Santa
Teddy bears macaroni and cheese
Colors and numbers
Hide and go seek
Take me
Back to the me
I used to be
Back then



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EdytD SILVER said...
on Sep. 7 2009 at 9:48 am
EdytD SILVER, Livingston, New Jersey
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Aww, this was sweet. I think if you put a bit more imagery in this piece (for example, describe the popsicle stains or the winter nights), you could create a fabulous poem that the reader can see in his/her mind.

Good job!

on Sep. 6 2009 at 4:52 pm
ShernayB. DIAMOND, Southfield, Michigan
62 articles 1 photo 881 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Some things will never change"---Tupac

I like this piece. I could see that you want to be back in your childhood. It's very creative.

on Sep. 6 2009 at 3:04 pm
know the feeling. it hurts.

Jaquie BRONZE said...
on Sep. 4 2009 at 7:18 pm
Jaquie BRONZE, West Palm Beach, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
This is certainly one of my favorites: "I will become even more undignified than this, and I will be humiliated in my own eyes." -2 Samuel 6:22

Wow! I really like this.... Great work. Keep writing!

God bless,

...,

LiuqingYang said...
on Sep. 4 2009 at 10:27 am
LiuqingYang, Puyang, Other
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Back to

"Long summer days and winter nights

Waiting for snow

Waiting for Santa"

I love these sentences!~

on Sep. 4 2009 at 4:43 am
ZebraWithoutStripes ELITE, Blue Springs, Missouri
102 articles 8 photos 85 comments

Favorite Quote:
To make a difference in the world, you have to be different from the world.

:) this is so sweet! i feel the same way a lot of times.

Amber1994 GOLD said...
on Sep. 3 2009 at 5:48 pm
Amber1994 GOLD, Roanoke, Illinois
15 articles 6 photos 47 comments
awsome! i feel that way somtimes, juss want ta be a kid again.

-please check out my poems and comment!-

on Sep. 3 2009 at 5:32 pm
Ms.Understood, Laramie, Wyoming
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I finally feel like someone feels the same way! I mean people look at me weird when i say i wish i were five again! LOL. (Connection!)

IrisGF DIAMOND said...
on Sep. 2 2009 at 9:32 pm
IrisGF DIAMOND, Birmingham, Alabama
55 articles 0 photos 5 comments
Thank you for your comment. It means a lot to know that this piece meant something to someone besides myself. I'm glad you enjoyed it! Always, Iris

forloveofart said...
on Sep. 2 2009 at 9:08 pm
This was so amazing!!! I think it's so relatable... And so many people feel this very longing to go back when times were more simple and, through childhood eyes, perfect. The feeling that you portrayed beautifully!!! Well done!


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