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Take me back
To when I only wore dresses
With ribbons around my
Back
Take me back
To when Popsicle stains
Edged the sides of my lips
It’s a fact
That every day people wonder
What might have been
And then
They want to go
Back
Back to
Long summer days and winter nights
Waiting for snow
Waiting for Santa
Teddy bears macaroni and cheese
Colors and numbers
Hide and go seek
Take me
Back to the me
I used to be
Back then





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EdytD said...
Sept. 7, 2009 at 9:48 am
Aww, this was sweet. I think if you put a bit more imagery in this piece (for example, describe the popsicle stains or the winter nights), you could create a fabulous poem that the reader can see in his/her mind.
Good job!
 
lovehate29 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Sept. 6, 2009 at 4:52 pm
I like this piece. I could see that you want to be back in your childhood. It's very creative.
 
cross-i'd- leopard said...
Sept. 6, 2009 at 3:04 pm
know the feeling. it hurts.
 
LiuqingYang said...
Sept. 4, 2009 at 10:27 am
Back to
"Long summer days and winter nights
Waiting for snow
Waiting for Santa"
I love these sentences!~
 
So-calledLife This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Sept. 4, 2009 at 4:43 am
:) this is so sweet! i feel the same way a lot of times.
 
Amber1994 said...
Sept. 3, 2009 at 5:48 pm
awsome! i feel that way somtimes, juss want ta be a kid again.
-please check out my poems and comment!-
 
Christian T. said...
Sept. 3, 2009 at 5:32 pm
I finally feel like someone feels the same way! I mean people look at me weird when i say i wish i were five again! LOL. (Connection!)
 
forloveofart said...
Sept. 2, 2009 at 9:08 pm
This was so amazing!!! I think it's so relatable... And so many people feel this very longing to go back when times were more simple and, through childhood eyes, perfect. The feeling that you portrayed beautifully!!! Well done!
 
IrisGlorianaFletcher This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Sept. 2, 2009 at 9:32 pm
Thank you for your comment. It means a lot to know that this piece meant something to someone besides myself. I'm glad you enjoyed it! Always, Iris
 
Jaquie This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Sept. 4, 2009 at 7:18 pm
Wow! I really like this.... Great work. Keep writing!
God bless,
...,
 
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