No More

The burn of my tears
The sting of this pain
Have been for years
Pounding like rain
Now I've cried my last tear
I'll be stung no more
Now that you're here
Don't walk out the door
You're leaving me now
Cutting a scar
It's stinging somehow
I'm bleeding as you get in you're car
I am crying alone and afraid
You're driving farther, and farther away
If only you'd see the mess you have made
Not knowing I'm dying, I'm dying today
I've cried my last tear
I'll be stung no more
You hurt me here
You walked out the door





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miracle_of_hope said...
Aug. 8, 2011 at 4:08 pm
i think the emotion is evident but numb..... just the way the girl/boy might be feeling-like the emotion is too much and the body shut itdelf off from the pain
 
dreamer_believer said...
Oct. 4, 2009 at 4:13 pm
this is pretty good! the rhythm is there, and the flow is great :) i don't get the emotion as strong as i should, but this is really a great piece :) bravo!
 
Jenna B. replied...
Oct. 5, 2009 at 6:11 pm
i agree that the emotion isnt as strong as it should be, i need a critic. i say this with truth. Check out some of my other pieces and let me know what you think. Again thank you so much.
 
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