No More

August 19, 2009
By Hugs-N-Kisses GOLD, Alta Vista, Kansas
Hugs-N-Kisses GOLD, Alta Vista, Kansas
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The burn of my tears
The sting of this pain
Have been for years
Pounding like rain
Now I've cried my last tear
I'll be stung no more
Now that you're here
Don't walk out the door
You're leaving me now
Cutting a scar
It's stinging somehow
I'm bleeding as you get in you're car
I am crying alone and afraid
You're driving farther, and farther away
If only you'd see the mess you have made
Not knowing I'm dying, I'm dying today
I've cried my last tear
I'll be stung no more
You hurt me here
You walked out the door

The author's comments:
I was inspired to write this when a friend of mine had a really hard time losing her boyfriend.

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on Aug. 8 2011 at 4:08 pm
secrets_of_silence GOLD, Gisborne, Other
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Favorite Quote:
life had i loved the more
had it but passed away
as quietly as the day
ebbs from the darkening star.


-emanuel litvinoff

i think the emotion is evident but numb..... just the way the girl/boy might be feeling-like the emotion is too much and the body shut itdelf off from the pain

on Oct. 5 2009 at 6:11 pm
Hugs-N-Kisses GOLD, Alta Vista, Kansas
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i agree that the emotion isnt as strong as it should be, i need a critic. i say this with truth. Check out some of my other pieces and let me know what you think. Again thank you so much.

on Oct. 4 2009 at 4:13 pm
jennee21_ann GOLD, Helper, Utah
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Favorite Quote:
"Don't gain the world and lose your soul....wisdom is better than silver or gold."

"You can always close a book, but you can never close the mind of a writer."

this is pretty good! the rhythm is there, and the flow is great :) i don't get the emotion as strong as i should, but this is really a great piece :) bravo!


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