let us submerge MAG

August 19, 2009
By Jennax3 SILVER, Palos Verdes Estates, California
Jennax3 SILVER, Palos Verdes Estates, California
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coquina shells sprawled about the shore
containing the scraps of you and me,
shattered and jaundiced with age.
they have to sit to keep from drifting
into the foaming tethers of the sea.

but
now

you plunge, with little more than the faith
that this abyss will reveal its roots,
and in your steps i'm sinking
yet i always thought i would float.
a cool repose deluges my soul

and
now

a purpose is restored.



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on Jun. 1 2011 at 5:11 pm
krarthurs SILVER, Plymouth, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
All generous minds have a horror of what are commonly called "Facts". They are the brute beasts of the intellectual domain.
-Thomas Hobbes

This was so beautifully worded. Absolutely wonderful. You are an incredible and talented poet. Don't stop writing!

on Apr. 1 2010 at 7:54 pm
elfiewrites BRONZE, Hillsdale, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
"The seat of knowledge is in the head, of wisdom, in the heart."~William Hazlitt
"Be yourself, everyone else is taken."

I love your poetry! You are such a great poet! I would love if you could comment on my work as well. Thanks so much.

on Sep. 6 2009 at 5:18 pm
carolinesell PLATINUM, Cedar Falls, Iowa
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WOW!

i really love this poem!!!

it's so short, but packed full with meaning!

i wish i could write like that--my poems get pretty long in order for me to get my point across.

:) AMAZING WORK!!!

on Aug. 25 2009 at 2:54 pm
kristent BRONZE, Culdesac, Idaho
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this is really good! i liked it soo much!! thanks for your commment.

on Aug. 24 2009 at 8:39 pm
TheUnknownGuest GOLD, Woodbridge, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
I can't remember it clearly, but it went something like this:

"The past is the past, the future is the furture. But now, now is like a gift, which is why it is called present."

I like it! :)

on Aug. 24 2009 at 4:06 pm
ThereIsAlwaysHope GOLD, Belfast, Other
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Favorite Quote:
'Miles to go before I sleep'
- Robert Frost

totally awesome. keep it up. (:

on Aug. 22 2009 at 3:55 am
KDtheGhostwriter GOLD, Jefferson City, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
"You are not special; And I am no hero."

Hey, I'm Kyle. You commented on my poem, "Everything Man." Thanks, by the way. It's pretty flattering getting a comment like that from a writer as good as you. This poem was pretty deep. Good job! I like how that last poem lets the reader fill in the blanks. Keep writing and thanks again!

on Aug. 21 2009 at 11:32 pm
kiwi12 PLATINUM, Austin, Texas
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whaa!!! totally amazing.

on Aug. 21 2009 at 3:47 pm
Inkspired PLATINUM, Whitby, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"If one will scoff at the study of language, how, save in terms of language, will one scoff?" - Mario Pei
"I write for the same reason I breathe - because if I didn't, I would die." Isaac Asimov

Love it! You use really good language, I loved the last line, and it's full of hidden meaning. Amazing!




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