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hey great piece, the end was a surprise and thanks for the comment on my spring days poem!

The details are awesome! =) I love all of your works! Bet you have a great writing career ahead of you!

the last line was a real surprise.
well done, this is an awesome, original piece :)

i agree, the end was surprising.
i like it though--it is very original.
:) great job!

wow, the last part was indeed a surprised and the detail you used is awesome. great work! (:

This is pretty good. It fits well.

This is really cool and deep. XD. Love!

Like, whoa.

this is prolly the best one ive read so far.

This poem is really unique and makes the reader contemplate the lines you used--not everything is cut-and-dry, and I like that. Thank you for commenting on my poem, as well! Continue to write. You sure know how to.

this was amazing. :) and i'm shocked i put your feelings in words. but thanks for the tip and the comment. :)

I really liked how you made the man yourself - I thought that was an interesting spin. Before I read the last line, I had thought that you wanted the reader to relate to the man, alone. The last line is interesting and kind of an odd spin, but it definitely gives the reader something to think about! I had thought that there were other people, but that, say, they were outside - and he was alone in his bathroom, watching them. If you wanted, instead of saying "has died," you can say "has gone," ... (more »)

I can't believe the talent you have with words. Like EdytD, the last line really suprised me. I don't know what to say. You are beautiful and amazing, my friend.

This is great, I like the way you make the man yourself, and the last line was a real surprise! Thanks for the comment!