The Drowned Girl

April 26, 2009
By Captain-Tightpants GOLD, Lawrenceville, Georgia
Captain-Tightpants GOLD, Lawrenceville, Georgia
18 articles 17 photos 19 comments

The cold blooded fishes play
Around the cold girl down there
Their game goes on oblivious
Of the drowned girl

A sad accident
Or malicious intent
Nobody really knows
Save the drowned girl

Her rosy cheeks
Now pale as the water
That woman at rest
The drowned girl

If you look hard
From a spot on the bridge
You can still see
The drowned girl

The cold blooded fishes
Nibble at her body
The tender flesh of a tender age
The drowned girl



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on Sep. 21 2010 at 9:22 pm
Aristine BRONZE, Coppell, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
Show me a hero and I will write you a tragedy. - Scott F. Fitzgerald

I enjoyed the repetition of "the drowned girl." I think it was used quite effectively. "Cold-blooded fishes" is a nice great description.

on Aug. 17 2009 at 9:31 pm
Captain-Tightpants GOLD, Lawrenceville, Georgia
18 articles 17 photos 19 comments
Thank you. It's not my favorite piece but then again they don't pay so they don't get my best work.

on Aug. 16 2009 at 8:03 pm
MeghanMichelle GOLD, Hooksett, New Hampshire
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I love your imagery in this poem! I can imagine this scene.




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