A Devil's Reply

March 29, 2009
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I’ll lie and I’ll try. I swear to myself, I’ll love you till I die.
This sickening love follows with tears from my eyes.
Dreary little raindrops with blood red dye.
Chaos near the center, between the roping tie,
split apart the narrow spaces, the narrow sly.
The devils drenched sigh led with the memos reply.
My head heavies with the deserted word, goodbye.





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Zero_Kiryu This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 9, 2009 at 12:13 am
This sounds like a bad-break up but something more. Something insubstantial that I can't quite catch, like in the back of my mind I understand it, but I can't quite get back far enough. BRAVO!!! This is excellent. ZERO
 
Electricity This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 8, 2009 at 11:23 am
wow, that was deep. It seems sad, and I can feel pain. It flowed nicely. i like it. I read it cause i saw you are from China. I am too, but I don't remember it (i was ADOPTED!!!)... i am from the Henen provence, Louyang... my Chinese name is Dang xiao lit, but my mom changed it... people sometimes make fun of me and tease me because I'm Chinese. So, for that reason, i feel connected to this poem. 5 starts!
 
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