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July 26, 2009
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Mother without her child
Rocking-chair without a dreamer
Christmas without hope
A wooden swing without laughter
Angels without a heart
Child without life
Sandbox without toy soldiers
Writer without a pen
Lovers without love
An ending without end





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phoebe-bird said...
Aug. 9, 2009 at 4:55 pm
I like it when it gets deeper and sadder, and in the end it really moves me from a spiritual level. You are such a great writer and I think we may have a lot to talk as well. Can you give me your contact information and just let me know if you are in China. -Liu
 
heart_on_my_sleeve said...
Aug. 8, 2009 at 2:40 am
I love the idea in this poem! This wave of sudden, somber understanding crashes on you at the first line! You should've written more! Keep going! It's so moving! Btw I'm the girl who wrote "Crystals" about my friend who committed suicide? I stopped writing stuff on this site for a while
 
Zero_Kiryu This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 8, 2009 at 12:56 am
I like this, it gets me thinking about what things would be like without certain things. It makes me kinda sad. Thanks for all your comments. I belive the word you were looking for is metaphor.
ZERO
 
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