Breathe

August 2, 2009
By LoveLikeWoe DIAMOND, LeSueur, MN, Minnesota
LoveLikeWoe DIAMOND, LeSueur, MN, Minnesota
54 articles 2 photos 748 comments

Favorite Quote:
Whoever laughs first has the sickest mind.


The party is over
You and I are the last to be leaving
We’re sitting on separate sides of the room
It’s dead quiet.
The only sound is our breathing.
I take a glance at you
You head is bowed and I can’t see your face
I tap my foot anxiously.
I’m leaving before you
I know what you’re thinking
And I wish you’d make your move
I’m still watching you
Your head raises
Your blue eyes find my emerald ones
I take in a breath and hold it
You start to get up, walking to me
I hear the sound of a car horn and glance out the window.
I shot you a cold look
And walked out the door.
I exhaled sharply.
And realized,
I’d forgotten to breathe.

The author's comments:
I wrote this in my journal and i thought it was pretty good so i posted it.

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on Sep. 1 2009 at 5:48 am
LoveLikeWoe DIAMOND, LeSueur, MN, Minnesota
54 articles 2 photos 748 comments

Favorite Quote:
Whoever laughs first has the sickest mind.

thank you HMMMM121!!!!!

HMMMM121 said...
on Aug. 31 2009 at 5:24 am
I just love your poems always so heartfelt. Keep up the good work.

EdytD SILVER said...
on Aug. 25 2009 at 12:54 am
EdytD SILVER, Livingston, New Jersey
6 articles 0 photos 258 comments
I really like this! I think the last two lines are particularly powerful. I have definitely been in situations like this, and I know exactly how you/the narrator feels. Great job!

Schubster said...
on Aug. 20 2009 at 3:01 am
I love your work :) once again, awesome job with this.

on Aug. 6 2009 at 8:04 pm
Dreamer123 SILVER, Oviedo, Florida
9 articles 4 photos 45 comments
This is so powerful. I can see the whole scene. this is great i love your wording. this is very interesting from the beginning. Yet very powerful. this is great keep up the great work. God Bless. :D


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