August 1, 2009
Theres this book.
Called a BIBLE.
It means alot to me.
It was given to us by GOD.
Whos love goes beyond degree.
It tells of storries of LIFE and of DEATH.
It even predicts of a time when the world will take its last breathe.
The BIBLE tells me how to act to please this GOD above.
It also tells of how he saved me with his amazing love.
Through him I secure life after death
An amazing feet to me.
I'll go to Heaven when I die and

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Kara P. said...
Aug. 10, 2009 at 10:07 am
(theredlettera:) Thanks for the postivie response and sorry that I corrected you twice. I feel like a jerk. Didn't mean to. Comment kept getting deleted and I re-typed it about a million times. (hahahaha)
Seriously though, keep it up. I'll try to search for your other work until it gets posted.
okie-dokie said...
Aug. 8, 2009 at 11:35 pm
Yeah even I have to admit that. It just came to me so I wrote it. I wrote two more poems that are still being edited. One is called A MAN the other is called AT THE CROSS. thanks for the spelling check lets just say I'm not exactly the greatest when it come to spelling.
theredlettera said...
Aug. 6, 2009 at 8:58 am
I'm glad you choose to show your strong faith in your work, but this seemed a little juvenille and uncreative to me.
Also, feat. Not FEET.
Christian music (lyrics) and poetry tend to be shallow and unimpressive. Same old recycled words that you could read in a Hallmark Valentine's Day card.
I think you should keep it up, just go outside the box a little more next time.
Also, FEAT. Not FEET.

Keep it up.
Sarah22 said...
Aug. 6, 2009 at 4:20 am
Electricity This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 5, 2009 at 10:31 am
Keep up your faith, it's great! ^_^
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