In the dark, yet in Peace

July 29, 2009
By alayapoetgirl BRONZE, St. Louis, Missouri
alayapoetgirl BRONZE, St. Louis, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
Life is hard; but it's harder if you're stupid. -John Wayne


I cant see a thing
where am I
Lost in the lies, and the fear
what do I do
I seemed to have forgotten
No place to go in the this world
except home
to my heart
and my words
that speak poetry
An endless path to another universe
a place only some can see vividly
a place unknown
in the dark
The dark isn't always a bad thing
it also represents calmness right
There I will go
and if you want you can come too



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tor10jax GOLD said...
on Aug. 30 2009 at 11:09 pm
tor10jax GOLD, Livingston, New Jersey
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I think this is a good poem (I especially liked the last few lines and the repetition in lines 11, 12, and 13) but I think it could use a bit more work. I'd get rid of the "and" before "my words" and I'd put more enters in (Ex: calmness right). But good job.

Keep writing!

on Aug. 6 2009 at 3:25 pm
jennee21_ann GOLD, Helper, Utah
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Favorite Quote:
"Don't gain the world and lose your soul....wisdom is better than silver or gold."

"You can always close a book, but you can never close the mind of a writer."

I like this! at first i didn't know where it was going to go, but the ending totally makes everything in the poem make sense :) i like this a lot. the title is also very creative. KUDOS :) also, comment and check out some of my work, i would love your opinion. KEEP WRITING! :)

KLD1992 GOLD said...
on Aug. 5 2009 at 4:52 pm
KLD1992 GOLD, Bradford, Massachusetts
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amazing poem




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