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In the dark, yet in Peace

I cant see a thing
where am I
Lost in the lies, and the fear
what do I do
I seemed to have forgotten
No place to go in the this world
except home
to my heart
and my words
that speak poetry
An endless path to another universe
a place only some can see vividly
a place unknown
in the dark
The dark isn't always a bad thing
it also represents calmness right
There I will go
and if you want you can come too



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tor10jax said...
Aug. 30, 2009 at 11:09 pm:
I think this is a good poem (I especially liked the last few lines and the repetition in lines 11, 12, and 13) but I think it could use a bit more work. I'd get rid of the "and" before "my words" and I'd put more enters in (Ex: calmness right). But good job.
Keep writing!
 
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dreamer_believerThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Aug. 6, 2009 at 3:25 pm:
I like this! at first i didn't know where it was going to go, but the ending totally makes everything in the poem make sense :) i like this a lot. the title is also very creative. KUDOS :) also, comment and check out some of my work, i would love your opinion. KEEP WRITING! :)
 
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iluvfruitbasket3 said...
Aug. 5, 2009 at 4:52 pm:
amazing poem
 
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