When the Stars Came to Visit that Night

July 28, 2009
By despurlock DIAMOND, Morgantown, West Virginia
despurlock DIAMOND, Morgantown, West Virginia
79 articles 0 photos 179 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The heart has its reasons which reason does not know." -Pascal, Pensees, 1670


The stars came to visit that night,
To sneak upon love's heavy eyes,
As they kissed their daughter goodnight.

And as she laid in their light,
To give into her body's cries,
The stars came to visit that night.

They danced about in delight,
Spinning as their dresses devised,
As they kissed their daughter goodnight.

So as to settle their plight,
While the parent's planned the emprise,
The stars came to visit that night.

It was prior to the child's wedding night,
When the stars were in their moonlit skies,
As they kissed their daughter goodnight.

The girl tossed in bundles of white,
And while she laid, none the wise,
The stars came to visit that night,
As they kissed their daughter goodnight.


The author's comments:
This is my first attempt writing a villanelle. I am very proud of this poem, and I would love to know what you think! Thanks so much! Happy writing :)

P.S. Some of the lines are a little longer, so if the structure appears to differ from the 3-3-3-3-3-4 pattern, it's because of the line length. (I'm not sure how it will look once actually published on the website,which is the reason for this little postscript). Thanks for understanding. :)

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on Dec. 31 2009 at 1:15 pm
despurlock DIAMOND, Morgantown, West Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
"The heart has its reasons which reason does not know." -Pascal, Pensees, 1670

No prob :)

on Dec. 31 2009 at 12:56 pm
TheWaitress SILVER, Denton, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"I'd rather run away with my imagination than run away alone" - Me :)

:) I'm sure you did. Well, thanks anyway for commenting :).

on Dec. 31 2009 at 12:44 pm
despurlock DIAMOND, Morgantown, West Virginia
79 articles 0 photos 179 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The heart has its reasons which reason does not know." -Pascal, Pensees, 1670

Well that stinks. UGH I put so much thought into that commment tooo!!!!!!!!!!!!!

on Dec. 31 2009 at 12:23 pm
TheWaitress SILVER, Denton, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"I'd rather run away with my imagination than run away alone" - Me :)

Hmm gonna have to say I didn't receive it. I did however receive a comment from you on Inkpop about Teenink. But no comments on teen ink.

on Dec. 31 2009 at 12:01 pm
despurlock DIAMOND, Morgantown, West Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
"The heart has its reasons which reason does not know." -Pascal, Pensees, 1670

on teenink :)

on Dec. 31 2009 at 10:29 am
TheWaitress SILVER, Denton, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"I'd rather run away with my imagination than run away alone" - Me :)

lol it's np, infact a bit funny. Emm did you comment here on teenink or is it on the other site?

on Dec. 30 2009 at 7:16 pm
despurlock DIAMOND, Morgantown, West Virginia
79 articles 0 photos 179 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The heart has its reasons which reason does not know." -Pascal, Pensees, 1670

My bad lol Sorry I couldnt remember the title exactly :( but did u recieve the comment? lol I really am sorry though! Ahh I feel horrible now

on Dec. 30 2009 at 6:51 pm
TheWaitress SILVER, Denton, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"I'd rather run away with my imagination than run away alone" - Me :)

Np ;)...lol sadly though I didn't receive your comment on "Ocean" since I don't have a peice titled under that name :D.

on Dec. 30 2009 at 5:07 pm
despurlock DIAMOND, Morgantown, West Virginia
79 articles 0 photos 179 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The heart has its reasons which reason does not know." -Pascal, Pensees, 1670

Thank you so much! That really really really means a lot to me! Did you get the comment reply I left on "Ocean"?

on Dec. 30 2009 at 4:11 pm
TheWaitress SILVER, Denton, Texas
8 articles 2 photos 23 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I'd rather run away with my imagination than run away alone" - Me :)

I read this while listening to Melodramma by Andrea Bocelli. The two go hand in hand quite well :). I've never read something that gave me chills before, that's called great writing! Thanks for the chills through my body as I read this great poetic masterwork!

on Aug. 11 2009 at 5:44 pm
amber0812 BRONZE, Veazie, Maine
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I really like this poem. I think the formatting is perfect for the story it conveys.

on Aug. 10 2009 at 7:12 pm
Carolina SILVER, Cedar Rapids, Iowa
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Very sweet poem. I have never heard of this type of poem before, but I really like it and you use it well. Keep it up!

on Aug. 6 2009 at 2:11 am
jennee21_ann GOLD, Helper, Utah
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Favorite Quote:
"Don't gain the world and lose your soul....wisdom is better than silver or gold."

"You can always close a book, but you can never close the mind of a writer."

wow this is great! it has rythym, a great layout, and a sweet story! i really really like it! thanks for your comments on my article "remembering". im glad i decided to check out your other work cuz this one is just as good as your others! but wow i love this poem, it has a really sweet and honest meaning! great job. check out some of my other work :)

on Aug. 5 2009 at 9:38 pm
kiwi12 PLATINUM, Austin, Texas
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I felt fluttered in... if that's the right word. I can't think of any other way to put it. Fantastic! =]

on Aug. 5 2009 at 9:32 pm
kiwi12 PLATINUM, Austin, Texas
28 articles 10 photos 365 comments
I like this very much! And it completely fits the picture you picked with it.




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