Fear

July 20, 2009
By Writerzhand GOLD, Ball Ground, Georgia
Writerzhand GOLD, Ball Ground, Georgia
16 articles 0 photos 30 comments

Favorite Quote:
I wanna carry a piece of who I was before so when I hit the wall, I REALLY hit the wall.


When everything falls
You seem to succeed
And I hate to dream
I hate to dream
You're haunting me like some bad song
A shadow gone wrong
A memory stood tall
I live my life around you
taking steps beside you
being gripped by you
holding my heart inside you
And where am I to go?
You see no wrong
You do no right
Day to day you grab clench and kill
silence
Screams can fill air
quicker than thick black smoke
and you choke us who breathe you in
Wishy washy, you're a tide
I wish I could watch you suffer
the way you made her
made him
made them
made me.
And I live with you
and hold in your presence
Reside in your castle
dwell in your being
Hoping one day the servitude will be released
But you drive us back in
to your shallow unbreakable walls
where hope is extinguished
And faith diminished.



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on Aug. 30 2009 at 7:51 pm
writerscramp PLATINUM, Green Bay, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
Anyone who says winning isn't everything,
Has won nothing.
``Mia Hamm

wow. that is powerful not only because of how you portray it but how u use peoples common fears

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on Aug. 21 2009 at 3:45 am
tor10jax GOLD, Livingston, New Jersey
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I agree with both of those comments. I also like the three lines that repeated "made". Good job. Keep writing!

Zero_K DIAMOND said...
on Aug. 18 2009 at 6:47 pm
Zero_K DIAMOND, Moosic, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
"Life's no fun if you're not insane, otherwise you grow up to be an accountant." -Moi

I love how you make the emotion fear seem like a real person. This is so true and powerful. Thank you for your comment!

ZERO

on Aug. 14 2009 at 6:47 pm
jennee21_ann GOLD, Helper, Utah
17 articles 0 photos 568 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't gain the world and lose your soul....wisdom is better than silver or gold."

"You can always close a book, but you can never close the mind of a writer."

very powefull. you build the poem up to such a great ending and i really like it :) you did great with this one! check out some of my work and comment, i love the feedback. keep writing!


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