July 20, 2009
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When everything falls
You seem to succeed
And I hate to dream
I hate to dream
You're haunting me like some bad song
A shadow gone wrong
A memory stood tall
I live my life around you
taking steps beside you
being gripped by you
holding my heart inside you
And where am I to go?
You see no wrong
You do no right
Day to day you grab clench and kill
Screams can fill air
quicker than thick black smoke
and you choke us who breathe you in
Wishy washy, you're a tide
I wish I could watch you suffer
the way you made her
made him
made them
made me.
And I live with you
and hold in your presence
Reside in your castle
dwell in your being
Hoping one day the servitude will be released
But you drive us back in
to your shallow unbreakable walls
where hope is extinguished
And faith diminished.

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SarahW. said...
Aug. 30, 2009 at 7:51 pm
wow. that is powerful not only because of how you portray it but how u use peoples common fears
tor10jax said...
Aug. 21, 2009 at 3:45 am
I agree with both of those comments. I also like the three lines that repeated "made". Good job. Keep writing!
Zero_Kiryu This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 18, 2009 at 6:47 pm
I love how you make the emotion fear seem like a real person. This is so true and powerful. Thank you for your comment!
dreamer_believer said...
Aug. 14, 2009 at 6:47 pm
very powefull. you build the poem up to such a great ending and i really like it :) you did great with this one! check out some of my work and comment, i love the feedback. keep writing!
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