Betrayal

July 16, 2009
By unearthlyhaphazard GOLD, N/A, New York
unearthlyhaphazard GOLD, N/A, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"There are three rules for writing the novel. Unfortunately, no one knows what they are."~W. Somerset Maugham


I don’t care



Plotting revenge . . .

Doesn’t matter to me




Why did I trust you?

Already moving on




Thanks for everything, jerk!

Forgetting you starting now




Shedding tears because of you . . .

Got a whole phonebook of names




You’re blinking in my mind!

Enjoy your life




While betrayal is burning me.


The author's comments:
It was originally supposed to be a piece about a back-stabbing friend, but it took a different direction into the breakup route. I've never been in a relationship or anything, so I can't really write about the exact feeling. I hope I got pretty close. And to all of you who've been cheated on/hurt/been broken up with nastily, your ex was a complete IDIOT!

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on Aug. 5 2009 at 5:49 pm
unearthlyhaphazard GOLD, N/A, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"There are three rules for writing the novel. Unfortunately, no one knows what they are."~W. Somerset Maugham

It's the first time I've done a poem like that, so your comment means a lot to me. Thank you, tigeress3!

on Aug. 5 2009 at 3:41 pm
tigeress3 PLATINUM, Dayton, Ohio
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Beautiful. I love the choppy lines.

on Aug. 3 2009 at 10:20 pm
unearthlyhaphazard GOLD, N/A, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"There are three rules for writing the novel. Unfortunately, no one knows what they are."~W. Somerset Maugham

Thanks a million, BeccaBlue826! That's really what I wanted to convey through the poem, the tangle of emotions after you've been hurt by someone. I'm glad that you think it could also work for a friend, too.

on Aug. 3 2009 at 7:34 am
GreenWriter826 PLATINUM, McAllen, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
''Their fruits like honey to the throat
But poison in the blood'' - Christina Georgina Rossetti "Goblin Market"

i sometimes express anger in happiness and sadness in anger...emotions just get jummbled up sometimes but its fine because at least something good came from it...like this peice very good emotion...and it kind of sounds like a 'close' back stabbing friend...


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