broken bridge

July 14, 2009
By poetic_natural GOLD, Jefferson, Wisconsin
poetic_natural GOLD, Jefferson, Wisconsin
16 articles 0 photos 66 comments

Favorite Quote:
"you know you're in love because you can't fall asleep, because reality is finally better than your dreams"


Secrets unsolved.
worlds revolve.

love crashes as i
pick up the ashes.

feel the pain as
our love is stained.

Walk the bridge of
broken wood. I'll take
you to where i once stood.

By your side, i will survive.
breathe your air, i will prepare.

Feel depressed, i can confess,
love burns a hole right through
my chest.

My hearts still pumping, i can hear it thumping.

There's one thing i know that i can declare, that love is true it doesn't have to be fair.



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on Sep. 2 2009 at 6:50 am
poetic_natural GOLD, Jefferson, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
"you know you're in love because you can't fall asleep, because reality is finally better than your dreams"

Yeah thanks for the comment. I have also been looking at your poetry and it really is good. And about the depressing poems...it's just easier to write them and they all relate to my life and It takes me a longer time to think of happy poetry but thanks for the tip feel free to look at my other ones :) thanks

EdytD SILVER said...
on Sep. 1 2009 at 12:13 am
EdytD SILVER, Livingston, New Jersey
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Interesting; I like the rhyming. I think that some lines have really good graphic imagery, especially "love is stained." I think instead of saying that you feel depressed, you could instead describe your depression - your face, your feelings, using imagery and/or metaphorical language that the reader can really relate to.



Great job!

on Aug. 21 2009 at 10:30 pm
RadioShower PLATINUM, Rio Rancho, New Mexico
23 articles 5 photos 69 comments

Favorite Quote:
Emo is imaginary - Gerard Way
Normalness leads to sadness -Phil Lester (AmazingPhil)

Amazing so sad (what is it with you and sad stuff? Just kidding i writ sad all the time!) GO SORROWFUL LOVERS!!!!

on Aug. 20 2009 at 1:53 pm
Hope_Princess BRONZE, Hebron, New Hampshire
4 articles 4 photos 377 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Hope sees the invisible, feels the intangible, and achieves the impossible."

I absolutely love this poem and it's written in a such a special way all your own. Keep writing!

IRBFGW DIAMOND said...
on Jul. 31 2009 at 2:50 am
IRBFGW DIAMOND, Cincinnati, Ohio
53 articles 1 photo 223 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Hey, assbutt!" Supernatural, Castiel.

Ohhh, nice! I like it! Very deep and sweet. Honestly this is very cool and written in a nice artistic way. I like it alot!

on Jul. 29 2009 at 10:54 pm
GlassHeart SILVER, Black Earth, Wisconsin
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Good job.


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