River Valley

July 13, 2009
By SilverDawn GOLD, Burnaby, Other
SilverDawn GOLD, Burnaby, Other
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It gurgles and splashes in the moonlight
Drowning within itself
But it whispers dangerously on the brink of dawn
Reborn into a sharp new sword
Shining and beautiful, it slices the earth
Cutting deeper towards the heart of the mountain
Determined and facing straight ahead
It rushes into the battle
Forcefully shoving and pushing to its destiny
Yet its strength melts into a graceful flow
Until finally, tired and defeated
Does it embrace its brothers in death
Becoming one with a force far greater than it
Recruited into the ocean’s army.

The author's comments:
There are a lot of metaphors in this poem so it may be confusing and hard to understand but just keep in mind that I'm describing a river valley.

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on Dec. 12 2009 at 3:50 pm
clearwater1408 GOLD, Blacksburg, South Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
time is our most valuable thing so dont live with regrets of wasting it, live like there will be no tomorrow

it was wonderful and had me seeing it in my head. no one can put a river in words as beautiful as this has

Jennax3 SILVER said...
on Aug. 17 2009 at 7:29 pm
Jennax3 SILVER, Palos Verdes Estates, California
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This was really interesting... what a unique metaphor! Not many people can describe a river valley as beautifully as this. good job :)

on Aug. 15 2009 at 2:15 am
carolinesell PLATINUM, Cedar Falls, Iowa
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this is a beautiful poem!!!

it's wonderful because i love metaphors and all of those clever poetry things...alliteration, line breaks, not rhyming...

i love it!!!

(ps. wanna read some of my work?)

on Aug. 6 2009 at 2:58 am
jennee21_ann GOLD, Helper, Utah
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Favorite Quote:
"Don't gain the world and lose your soul....wisdom is better than silver or gold."

"You can always close a book, but you can never close the mind of a writer."

looks like you have a lot of comments already but i really like this piece. i like all the metaphores because it gives the reader room for imagination. but you did a great job :) check out some more of my work and lemme know what you think :) and keep writing...you are great!

tor10jax GOLD said...
on Aug. 3 2009 at 5:53 pm
tor10jax GOLD, Livingston, New Jersey
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Like everyone else said, good job with this poem. The metaphors were really good and well written. I had to read it a few times to get a good of idea what was going on, but that's just me. Thanks for commenting on my poem. :D

Keep writing!

Sneha C said...
on Aug. 1 2009 at 8:45 am
Hey! ur poems r so awsome! keep it up! thank u very much for commenting in my poem. I'm Sneha C from India n 15 yrs old, nice to meet u!

on Jul. 31 2009 at 5:48 pm
MadisonC. SILVER, Montgomery Village, Maryland
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This is an amazing poem. You truly are talented! and thanks for your input on my other poem, sunset. i really appreciate your advice! keep up the good work!

MOhammed said...
on Jul. 28 2009 at 10:50 am
why cant i write this good! truly a poet:D

on Jul. 27 2009 at 1:14 am
MorningStar15 DIAMOND, Orange, Vermont
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its a awesome poem good use of words

on Jul. 26 2009 at 7:40 pm
one_of_a_kind_girl GOLD, N/A, California
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Wow, I love it. That is pure talent. I could never describe anything as well as you did in this poem.

Torrzilla GOLD said...
on Jul. 24 2009 at 6:28 pm
Torrzilla GOLD, Ames, Iowa
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"It gurgles and splashes in the moonlight Drowning within itself" ^_^ This has to be one of my most favorite lines ever. The poem is great. Nice work.

on Jul. 24 2009 at 8:51 am
evil_naiad PLATINUM, Afton, Virginia
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really nice imagery! :)


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