Dead Flowers

July 7, 2009
Painted Figures dance
across the floor
sparkles and ribbons
draped around their bodies
red and white flowers
hug my wrist
you smile, I blush
music plays,I hesitate
you assure me
I look great
I look down
at the flowers
I smile
joining the sea of figures
fading in and out
of the bright lights
as the music slows
you pull me close
I look at the flowers
which hug my wrist
beaming at their beauty
the music stops
the party's done...
...I lay in bed
staring at the flowers
wondering when you will
days pass
then weeks
slowly the petals
shrivel and decay
still you haven't called
I bury the flowers
in a deep coffin
there they sit
dead and shriveled
as you are to me

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Zero_Kiryu This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 22, 2009 at 10:52 pm
I think this is my favorite. I love the imagery and how you compared the dead flowers to the guy in the poem. Bravo! ZERO
Like*Whoa!!! This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 16, 2009 at 4:45 pm
great job:)
the rhythm is really what captured me, i like how it goes off in one direction and then comes back again:)
it is a beautiful poem
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kianapearl said...
Jul. 14, 2009 at 10:05 am
Great poem:) Really nice imagery. Keep writing.
JustMe said...
Jul. 14, 2009 at 2:56 am
Great job :) you really caprured the moment and used just the right words for visualization :) Thanks for commenting on my work, i appreciate it :)
SilverDawn said...
Jul. 13, 2009 at 10:39 pm
wow, i love how you compared the wilted flowers to the guy. good thing you can move on! (: loved the poem!
Matt R. said...
Jul. 13, 2009 at 8:06 pm
You did a good job of portraying the readers thoughts. i'm a fan of your work. Thnx for the comments on my poems btw. :)
cree8ive said...
Jul. 13, 2009 at 1:08 am
i really like your poem. you did a great job capturing what you wanted to and i really like your style.
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