This piece has also been published in Teen Ink's monthly print magazine.
Very good. You managed to capture a lot in a very short poem. Good job.
the first and last line really close in "the moment" i luv it!
VERY BEAUTIFUL!!!!!=)
i <3ed it and i wish i could meet you!
I <3 writing poems But you are lik so much better than me! LOL!!!
ur so good. u said so little, and yet so mucch
Pretty good. Very accurate discription. I agree with Eilina S., it needs a bit more rythem.
wow i really loved this poem you captured the moment so perfectly wonderful wonderful poem
I think more format and rhythym would have made this a winner, but otherwise it's ok. Nice work.
A great writer can say what they want to say in the fewest of words. Congratulations on accomplishing this and getting published. Well deserved.
Beautiful! Simple and yet cryptic and so so so meaningful. Keep it up!
wow annkaykay2011 is right! it IS intense, but that is what makes it so awesome!
Wow! I like the intensity and power this piece brings out. It is superb! I absolutely love it! Keep up the good work! Congrats on getting it published, by the way.
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life is a game but you cannot win if you live like a player.
i LOVE it! A LOT. This is a really good poem! Props to you! :)
i liked it. it's like the opposite of a poem i just did called being indifferent. :)
i love the simplicity of this, and your choice of words.
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