Tears

June 23, 2009
By camille_1441 PLATINUM, Westerville, Ohio
camille_1441 PLATINUM, Westerville, Ohio
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It’s rain that comes down white as snow,
Innocent tears I’ve never known,
From a place deep down inside my heart,
They rip,
They pull,
They tear me apart.
I don’t know if they come from my eyes,
Or from someplace deeper down inside,
I watch my facial expression bend,
My mouth turns down,
The tears have no end.
Who am to cry at night,
When others have to put up fights,
To find their food,
To get their shelter,
Still I’m fed and wanting more,
The tears keep coming,
Still they pour.
Gripping on for better life,
I lay down my head for sleep tonight.


The author's comments:
I was commenting on another persons poem who said she was crying when she wrote the poem and I started to think, "what if I wrote a poem about crying but without saying why the person is crying in the first place", that way everyone could relate to it.

As I always say feedback is so very much appreciated!

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on Jan. 4 2010 at 8:18 pm
waiting... SILVER, Harvard, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
The most beautiful discovery that true friends make - is that they can grow separately without growing apart

i love it so much, you are a good poet!

on Jul. 11 2009 at 6:35 pm
I really like all of your poems at night i cry in the middle of the night about i don't even know what

KLD1992 GOLD said...
on Jul. 6 2009 at 6:30 pm
KLD1992 GOLD, Bradford, Massachusetts
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amazing... i like how you describe whats happending

on Jul. 4 2009 at 1:59 am
xXsmileXx PLATINUM, St. Louis, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
"Your dreams only become intangible when you stop reaching" ~me ;)

I love this poem! You did a really good job making it relatable. Everytime i cry i can't help think how stupid it is. Cuz what you said in your poem is true,

"who am I to cry at night,

when others have to put up fights?"

Very well done!

on Jul. 2 2009 at 5:17 am
xXxFallingTearsxXx GOLD, Cottonwood, Idaho
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this is truly beautifuly amazing!! great job on this one :) i agree with SilverDawn, i never think of anyone else when i'm crying, so that was so sweet when you included that. great job!

on Jun. 30 2009 at 11:06 pm
SilverDawn GOLD, Burnaby, Other
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aww, that was nice to include the part about less-fortunate people. I was a little surprised at that. I mean, when I'm sad, all I can think about is my own issues (selfish, i'm sorry D: ) I love this line the best: "I watch my facial expression bend" because I can so easily imagine it and I'd never thought of smiles to frowns that way. it's so obvious but still, made me think a bit xD


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