you can't say I never wrote you a poem MAG

June 23, 2009
By stopmotionscene BRONZE, Jersey City, New Jersey
stopmotionscene BRONZE, Jersey City, New Jersey
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The days have anchors tethered to them, as do
the corners of my mouth and my eyelids
and my hopes. You turned me into an
addict, my lips chapped, my eyes
rimmed with raccoon rings and three hours
worth of sleep. This coffee is nicotine and you
are my cocaine, you are
a fine white dust that disappears
and settles on my insides. I wonder
why and how you consume me, what about you
is so outstanding, so worth destroying
who I am for you. I wonder, if a taxi
ran me over, left its skid marks on my skin,
trampled my teeth and bones and skull,
would they call your house, would you
answer your phone, would they
tell you the truth, would you
pause or stutter, would you
grip the phone tighter, would you
ask them to repeat that, would you
listen as they analyzed my mutilated self, from
the bloodshot brown eyes to the
severed, painted toes, would you
drop the phone, drop to your knees and
pay me back in tears –
or would you say, the way you always do,
nothing, and hang up?



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on Jan. 17 2012 at 9:31 am
necrophilikat PLATINUM, Greshamville, Georgia
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Amazing. 5 stars(:

Nessa13 GOLD said...
on Jan. 17 2012 at 7:46 am
Nessa13 GOLD, Charlestown, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
"Love, but never fall in love, because things that fall get broken"
-Taylor Swift

I absolutly LOVE this poem! It is so visual! It's amazing. there is so much anger and emotion in this short poem that it's amazing! 5 stars(:

on Jan. 17 2012 at 6:14 am
otherpoet SILVER, Wayland, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
"For beautiful eyes, look for the good in others; for beautiful lips, speak only words of kindness; and for poise, walk with the knowledge that you are never alone." - Audrey Hepburn

Wow, this has such an amazing message. You can talk about something so full of anger, and make it sound almost like music. Beautiful.

on Aug. 23 2011 at 1:41 am
Atlantis PLATINUM, Naylor, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
Because we are all looking for the complete definition of love (Beau Sia)

I absolutely LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE THIS! 

The flow is amazing.

Keep writing! 

ps. 5 stars (:


jmc.13 said...
on Nov. 9 2010 at 6:22 pm
jmc.13, Dobbs Ferry, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"I'd rather regret what I did than what I didn't do."

This is fantastic. I love the natural flow and intensity without cliches. I felt the phone on my face. 

on Aug. 2 2010 at 2:11 pm
ramnapotter PLATINUM, Toronto, Other
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Favorite Quote:
“Write to be understood, speak to be heard, read to grow...”

incredible . so so so incredible .

drop a comment on some of my work - you might like it .


Eilatan GOLD said...
on May. 16 2010 at 12:20 pm
Eilatan GOLD, Old Greenwich, Connecticut
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Favorite Quote:
"Nobody is normal. Everybody in the world is a weirdo freak. Except you, which makes you a weirdo freak."

OH MY GOODNESS THIS IS SO INCREDIBLE!!!!!!!

on Feb. 14 2010 at 10:39 am
stopmotionscene BRONZE, Jersey City, New Jersey
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thank you very much ! :D

on Feb. 14 2010 at 10:28 am
Dandelion PLATINUM, Franklin, Massachusetts
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I love the part about the raccoon eyes after three hours of sleep, and the way you elaborate on being run over by a taxi. It is just so bittersweet, so poignant, so perfect!

on Feb. 7 2010 at 3:33 pm
stopmotionscene BRONZE, Jersey City, New Jersey
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wow, thank you so much ! i'm really glad you liked it. that means the world to me. :D

JessAryn11 said...
on Feb. 4 2010 at 8:42 pm
I absolutely love this poem with my whole heart! I read this the first time in the January mag during school and I had a line from it stuck in my head all day, so I had to come on to the website and find it!!! I've read it probably 20 times now and it is soo amazing!! Thank you for writing this amazing poem!!!

on Jan. 8 2010 at 5:57 pm
stopmotionscene BRONZE, Jersey City, New Jersey
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wow, thank you! such a kind, thoughtful comment. I'm so glad you liked this poem. (:

on Jan. 7 2010 at 8:40 pm
wombatz-rule GOLD, Montrose, Minnesota
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Wow. This is amazing. Very, very good. You obviously put thought into it, but you didn't write it with the cliche, deep, profound feelings that most poems have. It had a bitterness to it that was edgy and unique. I love this poem.

on Jan. 5 2010 at 9:45 pm
stopmotionscene BRONZE, Jersey City, New Jersey
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thank you so much. that means a lot to me.

on Aug. 6 2009 at 3:55 pm
jennee21_ann GOLD, Helper, Utah
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Favorite Quote:
"Don't gain the world and lose your soul....wisdom is better than silver or gold."

"You can always close a book, but you can never close the mind of a writer."

wow. what a deep poem, i really like it. you did a great job writing it. the content is very scary but very very good :) well done! comment on some of my work please, i wuld love your opinion. well done on this piece!




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