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A rainbow of life
A light in the dark
No more shattered dreams
You're in my heart

A chorus of hope
A summer wish
Swimming through a life parade
Like a dreaming fish

Clattered desires
Won't you come here
With you around
No reason to fear

The attic of thoughts
Stories untold
Watching as life
Slowly unfolds

Catching a glimpse
Eyes on the prize
Don't even care
What's wrong and what's right

All that I need
Is you by my side
To forget all the times
I feared and I cried



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Anonymous said...
Oct. 10, 2009 at 1:09 pm
I was confused the whole time, needs work.
 
SilverAngel replied...
Oct. 10, 2009 at 5:30 pm
How can I fix it?
 
kimber replied...
Oct. 13, 2009 at 6:48 pm
its pretty good but it does need a bit of work!
 
SilverAngel replied...
Oct. 14, 2009 at 2:02 pm
Thank you all for taking the time to comment, how can I fix it?
 
aub13zzz said...
Oct. 5, 2009 at 6:55 pm
Wow that poem is awesome! the only thing i would say is that some of the words don't rhyme, like "dark" and "heart", "untold" and "unfolds" and "Prize" and right". i used to do that then my english teacher taught us about poetry and i learned how even tho it sounds like it rhymes it has to be exact... it's no biggy, though,it's just for the future. otherwise i really love the feeling, and the last 2 lines are so powerful! :D g... (more »)
 
aub13zzz replied...
Oct. 5, 2009 at 7:01 pm
oh, and i love ur icon!!!! lol it is adorable! :D
 
SilverAngel replied...
Oct. 7, 2009 at 3:10 pm
Thank you so much!!!!! I will work on that!
 
SilverAngel replied...
Oct. 7, 2009 at 3:12 pm
I have lot's of work pending approval!
 
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