Move On

Ever come across a rough patch in your life?
Felt like your life has come to a standstill?
One moment you felt on top of the world,
And the very next,you are going downhill?
Well,take a deep breath and move on.
Maybe,it was a fight with your BFF
Or bad grades in school,
Your first relationship turned out to be a total disaster,
Or your pet cat drowned in your neighbour's pool;
No matter how much it hurt,you gotta move on.
Your friday night's date stood you up
Or you lost a loved one to the whirlwinds of time,
You find that life has become a living hell for you,
And being alive-a crime;
Don't be pessimistic,learn to move on.
You're not perfect,neither is life
It has its fair share of ups and downs;
And whatever is there now,
tomorrow,may be gone.
Sad memories may haunt you,
But,you need to move on...:)





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cree8ive said...
Jul. 12, 2009 at 10:53 pm
thanks for commenting on my poem. i appreciate any feed back! i enjoyed yours. i think the message is great, and an important message. i don't want to take away from your style, but i think you should try working with different poetic elements (rythym, word choice, ect). like try writing the same thing different ways, and see which way sounds the best.
 
DinosoarJen This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 7, 2009 at 5:55 pm
Awe. I like this a lot. Very helpful. :]

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xXsmileXx This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 5, 2009 at 10:18 pm
thanx for ur commnets on my poems! I really like this. I like that you encourage people to move on and be happy, the world needs a little more of that:) Great job!!!!
 
Teenqueen said...
Jul. 4, 2009 at 9:49 am
To amyxu: Thnx 4 your advice:)I wanted the smiley face to be an encouraging smile,which would help us to move on.I'm glad you liked it!
 
amyxu said...
Jul. 3, 2009 at 5:25 pm
Hey great job! This is a message we all need to hear more of, I think. One suggestion: the smiley face at the end is cute, but it takes away the emotional impact of the poem. It lessens the effect on the reader, in other words. I like the common-sense approach you took to this topic and the poem flows really nicely. Good job!
 
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