Move On

June 23, 2009
By Teenqueen BRONZE, Pune, Other
Teenqueen BRONZE, Pune, Other
4 articles 0 photos 6 comments

Ever come across a rough patch in your life?
Felt like your life has come to a standstill?
One moment you felt on top of the world,
And the very next,you are going downhill?
Well,take a deep breath and move on.
Maybe,it was a fight with your BFF
Or bad grades in school,
Your first relationship turned out to be a total disaster,
Or your pet cat drowned in your neighbour's pool;
No matter how much it hurt,you gotta move on.
Your friday night's date stood you up
Or you lost a loved one to the whirlwinds of time,
You find that life has become a living hell for you,
And being alive-a crime;
Don't be pessimistic,learn to move on.
You're not perfect,neither is life
It has its fair share of ups and downs;
And whatever is there now,
tomorrow,may be gone.
Sad memories may haunt you,
But,you need to move on...:)



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cree8ive GOLD said...
on Jul. 12 2009 at 10:53 pm
cree8ive GOLD, Billings, Montana
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Favorite Quote:
"Our deepest fear is not that we are inadequate. Our deepest fear is that we are powerful beyond measure." Mariane Williamson

thanks for commenting on my poem. i appreciate any feed back! i enjoyed yours. i think the message is great, and an important message. i don't want to take away from your style, but i think you should try working with different poetic elements (rythym, word choice, ect). like try writing the same thing different ways, and see which way sounds the best.

on Jul. 7 2009 at 5:55 pm
DinosoarJen DIAMOND, Scottsville, New York
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Favorite Quote:
Just another casualty.
It's sad but true.
And even dead I'm still ahead
of most of you.

Awe. I like this a lot. Very helpful. :]



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on Jul. 5 2009 at 10:18 pm
xXsmileXx PLATINUM, St. Louis, Missouri
34 articles 0 photos 266 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Your dreams only become intangible when you stop reaching" ~me ;)

thanx for ur commnets on my poems! I really like this. I like that you encourage people to move on and be happy, the world needs a little more of that:) Great job!!!!

on Jul. 4 2009 at 9:49 am
Teenqueen BRONZE, Pune, Other
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To amyxu: Thnx 4 your advice:)I wanted the smiley face to be an encouraging smile,which would help us to move on.I'm glad you liked it!

amyxu said...
on Jul. 3 2009 at 5:25 pm
Hey great job! This is a message we all need to hear more of, I think. One suggestion: the smiley face at the end is cute, but it takes away the emotional impact of the poem. It lessens the effect on the reader, in other words. I like the common-sense approach you took to this topic and the poem flows really nicely. Good job!


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