You spin in diamond
Pale as the snow you came from
Spring sends you away
Pale as the snow you came from
Spring sends you away
This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.
Child of the Snow (Snow Angel)
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G.SpanglerThis was really good, the picture just adds to the imagery. Great work! :)
bullseye575 said...
Nov. 15, 2011 at 11:42 am:
Nov. 15, 2011 at 11:42 am:
that was a good little sory the hicus are the best
Merrdestm said...
Nov. 15, 2011 at 11:29 am:
Nov. 15, 2011 at 11:29 am:
I like this one because of the writers creativity.
Dr.AculaI love this Haiku :) But the word Diamond kind of through me off, because I always through it could be three syllables :p but I still liked it.
htrae22amazing i didnt lok at the title till the end and at the end i was like wow she is talking about a snow angel then it was like wow i was right
hotpink_girl200 said...
Aug. 19, 2009 at 7:53 pm:
Aug. 19, 2009 at 7:53 pm:
sweet simple and beautiful
I thought these comments were supposed to be positive and constructive ;) Nice work Elizabeth. A very nice haiku - could I make a few pointers?? I'm going to anyway...
Try and create the meaning of the poem so that it skimms below the surface of the writing.
But anyway I think it's great!
RamnaVery nice. Class all the way. Read my work? Please don't hesitate to comment. Thanks.
babe892
The title of this reminded me of the Elliott Smith song "Snow Angel", so in reading it, I was almost expecting something similar just because the title sort of called that to mind. And let me tell you, I wasn't disappointed. Short, simple, to the point, but very poignant.
MorningStar15Simple so simple! but soooo soooo beautiful...
Angel*music*loverI really love how you can say what you want to in little words. it is perfect!
Melinda L.
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