Heaven MAG

June 17, 2009
By awesomeaugust GOLD, Boston, Massachusetts
awesomeaugust GOLD, Boston, Massachusetts
10 articles 0 photos 176 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Keep your eyes on the stars and your feet on the ground"
~Theordore Roosevelt


Just through the clouds
Just beyond the bloody orange sunset
Lie golden gates
Lie people's fates
No hate
No crime
No war
No dying
You're a spirit
You're one with God

On this earth
So filled with
Hate
Crime
War
Death
It's hard to be sure
Sure that it's there
And sometimes
I cry
Because I think
How disappointed God must be
In me
For doubting
Doubting
Then I look
At the night sky
So black
Anything could be out there
The possibilities are endless
I look at the stars
A tiny billion miracles
Waiting to shine
Brighter, brighter
Than ever before
And my mom calls to me
“Go to bed, Sofia!”
Because it really is
Very late
No time for a little girl to be up
So I just peek
Sneak
One last look at that black canvas
Full of miracles
And I smile
Because He's there
I know He is



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on May. 25 2013 at 8:53 am
AnnieLovesMusic SILVER, Jeffreys Bay, Other
5 articles 1 photo 29 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life's not about surviving the storm its about dancing in the rain ~ Taylor Swift

I LOVED THIS! I love how you captured the eccense of having faith and being real :)

HopeM BRONZE said...
on Jan. 2 2013 at 1:32 pm
HopeM BRONZE, Tomball, Texas
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Amazing! I feel this exact way sometimes.

on Nov. 6 2011 at 6:04 pm
satellite23 GOLD, Cincinnati, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
Prove it.

Haha, just posted on one of your other stories five minutes ago. Now, this is deep! Good job!

Sarita H. said...
on Aug. 16 2011 at 1:28 pm

B e a u t i f u l<3

I've felt like that before, sometimes yor just doubting...but you know He's there...(:


Crogirl said...
on Sep. 13 2010 at 3:21 pm
Crogirl, Brezovica, Other
0 articles 58 photos 36 comments
So beautiful.
''Because He's there
 I know He is'' - I especially liked this  one. I know too.

_Mags_ SILVER said...
on Jul. 28 2010 at 9:09 am
_Mags_ SILVER, Somewhere, North Carolina
9 articles 7 photos 436 comments

Favorite Quote:
- I stare danger in the face and giggle
- Never argue with an idiot, people might not know the difference
-R.A.P (Retards Attempting Poetry)
-Tip Cologne ryhmes with alone

it made me smile too - and i'm sorry if this posts twice (it didn't post the first time lol) Your poem is and was amazing. All christians feel that way at some point no matter what - i have. You have alot of talent, keep writing.

btw-can you check out some of my stuff?


_Mags_ SILVER said...
on Jul. 28 2010 at 9:05 am
_Mags_ SILVER, Somewhere, North Carolina
9 articles 7 photos 436 comments

Favorite Quote:
- I stare danger in the face and giggle
- Never argue with an idiot, people might not know the difference
-R.A.P (Retards Attempting Poetry)
-Tip Cologne ryhmes with alone

it made me smile too, it's a beautiful poem and all christians feel that way at one time or another - i have for sure. You have a lot of talent. And i hope to check out more of your writings.

btw-can you check out some of my stuff?


on Jul. 10 2010 at 10:47 pm
yelyahmar14 BRONZE, Murfreesboro, Tennessee
3 articles 8 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
“Life is full of beauty. Notice it. Notice the bumble bee, the small child, and the smiling faces. Smell the rain, and feel the wind. Live your life to the fullest potential, and fight for your dreams.”

This is great. It really made me smile knowing everything in here is so right and so true. You captured His beauty. :) crazy good

on May. 6 2010 at 12:04 pm
ReflectionsofYou GOLD, Mason, Tennessee
10 articles 0 photos 107 comments

Awesome job.

Sometimes you just click on something, not suspecting anything, and then it's like WOW! how did I miss that? That's what your poem was like. Keep writing:]


on Apr. 17 2010 at 9:38 am
awesomeaugust GOLD, Boston, Massachusetts
10 articles 0 photos 176 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Keep your eyes on the stars and your feet on the ground"
~Theordore Roosevelt

Hi! (from the author)

Thanks so much for all of your comments- much appreciated. I'm slowly getting around to looking at and commenting on everyone's work and I can't wait to see more.

Thanks esspecially to "lauraea23"- I totally respect that you have differnt beliefs and I'm really glad that you could still enjoy this!


on Apr. 16 2010 at 6:20 am
starxoxo23 PLATINUM, New Hampshire, New Hampshire
21 articles 0 photos 97 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The creative is the place where no one else has ever been. You have to leave the city of your comfort and go into the wilderness of your intuition. What you'll discover will be wonderful. What you'll discover is yourself."
- Alan Alda

I LOVE it. I don't agree with your beliefs about God, but I love the descriptions and the imagery. Amazing!!! Keep on writing!

on Feb. 14 2010 at 10:30 pm
bamboom212 PLATINUM, Chestnut Ridge, New York
23 articles 0 photos 155 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The truth with a bad intent, is worse than any lie you can ever invent."
"You are smarter than you think. You are stronger than you look. You are braver than you feel."

luvvv it. this sets things into a really kOoL perspective :)) this is an incredible poem. awesome job

on Feb. 9 2010 at 1:29 pm
homewardbound, Billerica, Massachusetts
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I love it. This put a fantastic image in my head. I wonder too sometimes...

on Feb. 5 2010 at 1:48 pm
beautifuldownfall, Kkk, Iowa
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Wow... I doubt too, and I feel horrible about it, and yet I know that there must be SOMETHING. Very relatable!!! A++++++!! :)

on Aug. 29 2009 at 5:06 pm
distant_dreamer GOLD, Belmont, New Hampshire
12 articles 6 photos 498 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Life's a climb, but the view is great!"

I love this poem so much! I love your faith, and I know that someday you will become so famous, and this will be at the top of the list! You are so talented, and God has given you the ability to write, and let your emotions flow beautifully out on a peice of paper and make an incredible poem, story...you name it! I write poems, and one is called "God is with His Children", please check it out, and tell me how you like it because I would love to get a comment from you!!!! Thanks! <3

on Aug. 28 2009 at 10:30 pm
Hope_Princess BRONZE, Hebron, New Hampshire
4 articles 4 photos 377 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Hope sees the invisible, feels the intangible, and achieves the impossible."

Thanks so much for reminding me that God is always there even though I can't see him.

It flowed together so well, too.

Keep writing!

on Aug. 22 2009 at 11:46 pm
awesomeaugust GOLD, Boston, Massachusetts
10 articles 0 photos 176 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Keep your eyes on the stars and your feet on the ground"
~Theordore Roosevelt

Hi,(from the author) I really appreciate everyones feedback and have made all the changes thast have been suggeted. I'd love to keep improving this piece though, and any further comments who be greatly appreciated. If I make enough changes, perhaps I'll publish the new and improbved version. Thanks!

Mickey BRONZE said...
on Aug. 21 2009 at 11:47 pm
Mickey BRONZE, East Grand Rapids, Michigan
3 articles 0 photos 10 comments

Favorite Quote:
Tough times don't last. Tough people do.

i really liked this piece, the flow, the mood everything. you have great talent as a poet.

on Aug. 8 2009 at 2:12 am
edubois4 BRONZE, Port Neches, Texas
3 articles 0 photos 10 comments

Favorite Quote:
All great adventures require some risks.

I actually like the list like flow of this poem...great piece

SemiVeggie said...
on Jul. 29 2009 at 6:56 pm
I actually liked the "bloody" sunset description, but I agree that it felt a little forced and listlike. However, you have a great basis here.


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