American Dream MAG

By Ivy S., Loganville, WI

so this is where all the dreaming takes me
to a cold, empty reality
with sleep still in my eyes
shivering, confused, I must’ve overslept
now it’s time to wake up
one last yawn, then face the lies
I’m barefoot and the streets are rough
paved with broken glass
but that’s okay
’cause the land is flowing
with milk and honey
bread and butter
and justice
if you just keep on going ...





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chepe lew said...
on Jun. 10 2014 at 1:31 pm
chepe lew, Peoria, Arizona
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yes  

prab shah said...
on Dec. 5 2013 at 8:50 pm
can u plz explain me this .......

Rosie_Pearl said...
on Aug. 28 2013 at 9:31 pm
Rosie_Pearl, Forney, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
I'm not crazy, my reality is just different from yours <3

This is a really nice poem :) it was interesting read! However, the fact that only two lines rhyme puzzles me... other than that GREAT JOB!!! Also, I'd really appreciate if y'all would read some of mine

on Jul. 15 2013 at 11:41 pm
BananaGram BRONZE, Laurel, Montana
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Favorite Quote:
"I don't know where I'm going, but I'm on my way." - Carl Sagan

Very good poem, portrays America perfectly. Keep up the good work!

on Jul. 15 2013 at 3:39 pm
Isibeal19 PLATINUM, Pittsburgh, Pennsylvania
26 articles 12 photos 22 comments

Favorite Quote:
*Life isn't about waiting for the storm to pass, it's about learning how to dance in the rain.*

Great poem!! I love how it's so short, yet to the point, and meaningful

on Jul. 15 2013 at 1:15 pm
thezebrasgray PLATINUM, Taylorsville, Utah
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This is beautiful, truthful, and beautifully truthful. I also appreciate its simplicity. Good job!

on May. 10 2013 at 8:34 pm
writingriver05 SILVER, Boise, Idaho
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Favorite Quote:
"Reach for the moon, even if you miss you'll land amongst the stars."

I thought these posts were supposed to be positive about the poem besides this is a truly beatuiful poem how could someone downgrade it like that? 

on May. 10 2013 at 8:28 pm
writingriver05 SILVER, Boise, Idaho
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Favorite Quote:
"Reach for the moon, even if you miss you'll land amongst the stars."

American Dream is a beatuiful poem. And also very true. Oh, if only it wasnt i think this world would be a much better place. Dont you agree?

on May. 10 2013 at 12:49 pm
AWESOME. I can totally relate! This poem is amazing & it shows reality (:

on Mar. 30 2013 at 2:41 pm
DarkAngel101 GOLD, Birmingham, Alabama
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Favorite Quote:
"Don't count your tears, they mean only sorrow. But count the ones you hold back, which are your strength that makes you stronger."

I love it. It is amazing. 

TheoBV SILVER said...
on Mar. 29 2013 at 1:10 pm
TheoBV SILVER, Pound Ridge, New York
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Amazing. I loved it.

on Mar. 28 2013 at 3:03 pm
jfsdifdisofnsdklvn BRONZE, Hanahan, South Carolina
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WOW. Beautiful beautiful beautiful.

on Dec. 31 2012 at 11:47 pm
pcullen79 BRONZE, Ipswich, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
Isn't it pretty to think so? - Ernest Hemingway

great poem, i like how it is brief but communicates a longing for something more. it seems like you think in the same way i do as i could relate to this. keep writing stuff like this.

byebye said...
on Sep. 9 2012 at 11:07 am
byebye, Nevermore, Other
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That morizenbu posted a semi-rude comment on one of my poems, too. His/her comments are just downers. On another note, I really enjoyed this. Keep up the good work! :)

pencil led said...
on May. 3 2012 at 2:24 pm
I REALLY LIKED YOUR POEM I  THOUGHT THAT EVERYTHING WAS COOL AND INTERESTING. I ALSO NOTICED THAT YOU USED ASSONANCE AND METAPHORS, THEY AFFECTED ME BECAUSE IT HELPED ME UNDERSTAND IT A LITTLE BETTER.

on May. 3 2012 at 12:51 pm
Maranda D BRONZE, Waterford, Wisconsin
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American Dream is a fantastic poem. This poem is really long sort of like a sonnet. It likede how at the end it was kinf of like a meter.

on Apr. 6 2012 at 8:56 pm
Padfoot507 PLATINUM, Omaha, Nebraska
23 articles 2 photos 138 comments

Favorite Quote:
“It does not do to dwell on dreams and forget to live.”
-Albus Dumbledore

"I'm just a little bit caught in the middle,
Life is a maze, and love is a ridde."
-Lenka

woah there mr. critical, cool your jets :/ you forgot the "constructive" part in "constructive criticism"

-its a great poem! keep it up :)


morizenbu said...
on Jan. 30 2012 at 1:17 am
Are you kidding me? This is not only overblown and grandiloquent, (American dream? Seriously? You pick the theme out of a hat or was it your own idea?), identifying it clearly as teen work, but your naively simple perception of gritty contrast and rhetoric grinds any momentum this theme may have had in the hands of someone more able to a halt! Some advice- poetry is about self expression. If you seriously hanker for somewhere where the land is flowing with justice you might want to consider your own idealism of real issues as a theme instead.

on Jan. 14 2012 at 11:19 pm
kate12345me GOLD, Sydney, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"Rather than love, than money, than fame, give me truth." - Thoreau
"Sometimes you're flush and sometimes you're bust, and when you're up, it's never as good as it seems, and when you're down, you never think you'll be up again, but life goes on."

I see why this is popular. The words contradict each other, but it makes sense. Although I'm not American myself, I can imagine imagery of dark shapes, and frequent bursts of vibrant colours. This is very visually pleasing. Wonderful, keep it up! xo

Blairezie GOLD said...
on Jan. 14 2012 at 6:23 pm
Blairezie GOLD, Montrose, Colorado
18 articles 0 photos 14 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You must never give in to despair. When there is no hope, you give yourself hope. That is the true meaning of inner strength." -General Iroh

The visual on that poem was epic, and the theme was amazing- I loved the idea. The meter was confusing, since the first two lines rhymed and none of the others did. But that's literally the only thing I noticed! Great job.




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