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Once upon a time

June 13, 2009
By arimas SILVER, Columbia, South Carolina
arimas SILVER, Columbia, South Carolina
9 articles 0 photos 35 comments

but im stillhere
still standing here
and i havent moved on
and once upon a time
youd ask me why

and once upon a time
i would have had an answer
but im not really sure
of anything right now



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Shahed GOLD said...
on Jun. 3 2010 at 9:48 pm
Shahed GOLD, Tulsa, Oklahoma
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Favorite Quote:
"People are like tea bags, they don't realize their own strength until they're dropped in hot water "
“People are often unreasonable and self-centered. Forgive them anyway.
If you are kind, people may accuse you of ulterior motives. Be kind anyway."

Making them longer will not make them less intresting and I can asure you they wont start sounding bad you're talented and if you go with your ideas little farther (talking about poetry) you'll write such a beauty!

arimas SILVER said...
on May. 17 2010 at 4:47 pm
arimas SILVER, Columbia, South Carolina
9 articles 0 photos 35 comments
EVERYONE says that! i guess my poems are a bit short. but sometimes i think if i drag it out, it starts sounding bad, and if i just leave it where it is, it sounds better. but thx 4 ur comments! also MUSLIM MISS USA MAN!!!! haha. ive been happy all dddaaayyy!

Shahed GOLD said...
on May. 8 2010 at 9:30 pm
Shahed GOLD, Tulsa, Oklahoma
16 articles 2 photos 350 comments

Favorite Quote:
"People are like tea bags, they don't realize their own strength until they're dropped in hot water "
“People are often unreasonable and self-centered. Forgive them anyway.
If you are kind, people may accuse you of ulterior motives. Be kind anyway."

Why do you make them so short? I like it so much! But its when I started getting into it, it was the end already, try writing longer ones! :) good job!