I'm going to have to guess that this is about the individual versus the world, in which case, I love the idea.

The tears forming rivers line seems rather cliche.

And the use of the color red, and even the word desperation, seems to make his emotion TOO extreme. I know you want the contrast, but I think you gave it slightly too much there.

Also, the first two lines happen to rhyme, or maybe you intended it, but it stands out and creates an awkwardness.

Other than the "red with desperation" line, which I find rather, er, disturbing, I think it's wonderful.