My Heart, Sir MAG

June 10, 2009
By fiveinside2 BRONZE, Chapel Hill, North Carolina
fiveinside2 BRONZE, Chapel Hill, North Carolina
3 articles 0 photos 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
\"Don\'t tell me the sky\'s the limit if there are footprints on the moon.\"


police!
yes, ma'am?
I've had something stolen, sir.
what?
my heart, sir.

a dark-haired boy
who likes blue pixie sticks
and puts peanut butter
on ice cream.

hmm, I see. the thief.

on a cool night
after a school play and
an instant before
love's first kiss,

the scene of the crime …

found it in the grass,
lying soft and exposed,
to be crushed or held
by this boy,

and then the theft?

so he turned it
over in his hand
and holds it now, but I
fear its demise.

yes, I see, ma'am.
but unfortunately,
police don't recover
stolen hearts.

well, I suppose
that's good, sir. because,
you see, I think I stole
his heart, too.



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TrishDestiny said...
on Oct. 7 2014 at 7:44 am
This is definitely exceptionally amazing! I love the idea of the stolen hearts and the way you play with the plots. Not only that it is wonderfully written, I particularly how'd you ended it!

on Jan. 7 2011 at 10:32 pm
fiveinside2 BRONZE, Chapel Hill, North Carolina
3 articles 0 photos 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
\"Don\'t tell me the sky\'s the limit if there are footprints on the moon.\"

thank you :D

on Jan. 7 2011 at 10:32 pm
fiveinside2 BRONZE, Chapel Hill, North Carolina
3 articles 0 photos 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
\"Don\'t tell me the sky\'s the limit if there are footprints on the moon.\"

Thanks! I hope you like the rest of it too. (:

on Jan. 7 2011 at 10:31 pm
fiveinside2 BRONZE, Chapel Hill, North Carolina
3 articles 0 photos 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
\"Don\'t tell me the sky\'s the limit if there are footprints on the moon.\"

thanks! (:

on Nov. 12 2010 at 8:58 pm
taintedannex GOLD, Hong Kong, Other
15 articles 5 photos 166 comments

Favorite Quote:
The truth is that at some point, everyone's going to hurt you. You just have to decide who's worth the pain.

Some say having something to lose is what makes you vulnerable. I believe that having something to lose only makes you stronger.

Aww :)

I love the angle in which you wrote the poem from!


ellie75 BRONZE said...
on Nov. 12 2010 at 1:31 pm
ellie75 BRONZE, Nunica, Michigan
2 articles 0 photos 7 comments
I really enjoyed reading this. I liked how you ended it. Very good, I hope to read more of your work!

on Nov. 12 2010 at 8:51 am
D_Beauty BRONZE, Euclid, Ohio
2 articles 1 photo 27 comments

Favorite Quote:
"God didn't promise days without pain, laughter without sorrow, sun without rain, but He did promise strength for the day, comfort for the tears, and light for the way."

Aww...I thought this was kinda cute and  humorous. 

on Jul. 27 2010 at 4:13 pm
fiveinside2 BRONZE, Chapel Hill, North Carolina
3 articles 0 photos 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
\"Don\'t tell me the sky\'s the limit if there are footprints on the moon.\"

thanks (: when I wrote that, it wasn't my style to capitalize. I realize it's pretty amateur. most of my recent poetry is capitalized though (: I can't promise I'll care enough to do everything proper in comments though (:

TomsDiner said...
on Jan. 29 2010 at 6:36 pm
Sorry, dear! I wrote the word five in there twice! Anyways, keep posting. I'm interested in what else you can come up with.

TomsDiner said...
on Jan. 29 2010 at 6:35 pm
This was okay, but I really suggest you proofread before you post next time. Capitalization and punctuation issues tend to bother the educated reader. It seems like you just wrote this down and submitted it five all in five minutes. However, I think the through line is perfectly developed and you certainly have some raw creativity.




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