June 8, 2009
By Rylie GOLD, Terrebonne, Oregon
Rylie GOLD, Terrebonne, Oregon
10 articles 3 photos 6 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Love comes when manipulation stops; when you think more about the other person than about his or her reactions to you, When you dare to reveal yourself fully, When you dare to be vulnerable"

I was swooning over his radiance
To which was illuminating my dark eternity
Such a passionate feeling engulfed me
Distorting my mind to a vast emptiness
As his fierce gaze held me
Paralyzed in my own body
My desire to touch him was intensified
While she was still around
My craving, my fixation
Would go unsatisfied
But we both knew it wouldn't be starved

The author's comments:
Lets see um yet another from language arts class. In this one I had to use 5 words To make a poem which were: Swooning, radiance, illuminating, eternity, and distorting.

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on Jul. 18 2009 at 1:04 am
unearthlyhaphazard GOLD, N/A, New York
15 articles 0 photos 177 comments

Favorite Quote:
"There are three rules for writing the novel. Unfortunately, no one knows what they are."~W. Somerset Maugham

Intense. Your use of language is very powerful. Well done.


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