When Death Comes MAG

June 3, 2009

When death comes
Like sweat falling into an open wound
When death comes and takes every dream you've ever slept upon
By shaking you until you can't control yourself;
When death comes like a fever infusing your body;

When death comes
Like a grain of sand stuck in the eye
I want to step through the burning coals wondering what I have in store.

And therefore I look upon everything
As a polished antique;
And I look upon time as nothing more but a speed limit
And I consider imagination as another cracked window

And I think of each cloud as a magic carpet,
Wanting to take me away and show me
That I have nothing to fear –
Not even death

And each tear as hopeful as a baby learning to walk
And each smile as giving as the woman handing her last dollar
To the homeless man

When it's over, I want to say; every waking day
I was a princess born to happiness.
I was a prince praised for courage.

When it's over I don't want to regret much or cry myself to sleep.
I don't want to look at myself in the mirror eclipsed with pain and guilt
I don't want to be sorry for living a boring and careful life

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This article has 3 comments.

on Jun. 25 2013 at 11:31 pm
Charlize_Marie GOLD, Goose Creek, South Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
"Now faith is being sure of what we hope for and certain of what we do not see." Hebrews 11:1

The use of repetition here is effective and works with the "flow" of your poem. When you said " And I look upon time as nothing more but a speed limit" it gives your readers a mental image of something going at speed limit, that no matter how slow and steady, it'll get to its destination 

on Jan. 5 2010 at 4:16 pm
ghostfan16 BRONZE, Elgin, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
"I'm nobody's stepping stool. Get it, got it, GOOD!"

I thought it was inspiring. I think it kind of says that death is kind of like a nightmare that you can't wake up from. Then it goes on to say that you shouldn't fear death because the clouds will take you away from that.

on Jan. 4 2010 at 7:14 pm
abeatlesfan65 GOLD, Stillwater, Minnesota
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Favorite Quote:
"My greatest trouble is getting the curtain up and down." - T.S. Eliot

Neither do I... I'm sure a lot of people can connect with this, it's great!

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