Half Alive

May 31, 2009
By unearthlyhaphazard GOLD, N/A, New York
unearthlyhaphazard GOLD, N/A, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"There are three rules for writing the novel. Unfortunately, no one knows what they are."~W. Somerset Maugham


To die
But yet still live
To burn in white-hot flames
But with no mark on the cheek
The physical evidence indifferent
You don’t know
What’s floating in my head
The urge to just die
Hits me everyday
With a force as overpowering
As the ocean waves
With tormented eyes
And a knockout glare
Who wants to live
Like there’s nothing to live for
Who wants to live
Like the world’s devoid of life
With the fact
That everything is fragile
And permanent means nothing in this world
Constantly
Pounding
On their brains
When the only thing
You have
Is your
Intellect level
Suddenly your world
Doesn’t seem so easy
When you’ve loved so little
And lost so much
The world around you
Looks so different
Emotionless
Would be a gift from above
When pieces are all that’s left of you
Nobody tries
Wants
To understand
And then they wonder why
A punch stuns them in midair
Who wants to live
Like they’re half alive?

The author's comments:
I wrote this poem for one of my story characters, who is, as you can probably tell, not the happiest person alive.

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on Sep. 4 2009 at 10:01 pm
aspiring.author.09 PLATINUM, Beaumont, Other
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You are very welcome! And then, you did an excellent job of relating to your characters and your audience.

on Sep. 4 2009 at 9:42 pm
unearthlyhaphazard GOLD, N/A, New York
15 articles 0 photos 177 comments

Favorite Quote:
"There are three rules for writing the novel. Unfortunately, no one knows what they are."~W. Somerset Maugham

Thank you very much, aspiring.author.09! Actually, I really did write it for a character in one of my stories.

on Sep. 4 2009 at 6:50 pm
aspiring.author.09 PLATINUM, Beaumont, Other
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For some reason, I got a sense this "character" was you...very intriguing, keep it up!

on Aug. 8 2009 at 12:19 am
unearthlyhaphazard GOLD, N/A, New York
15 articles 0 photos 177 comments

Favorite Quote:
"There are three rules for writing the novel. Unfortunately, no one knows what they are."~W. Somerset Maugham

Thanks a million, TheUnknownGuest! I'm glad you think she's awesome. She doesn't. Sometimes I don't either.

on Aug. 7 2009 at 5:58 pm
TheUnknownGuest GOLD, Woodbridge, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
I can't remember it clearly, but it went something like this:

"The past is the past, the future is the furture. But now, now is like a gift, which is why it is called present."

I think this is how a lot of people feel, so if they read it, they'd probably be you biggest fan! I loved it! It's an awesome character!

on Aug. 5 2009 at 5:45 pm
unearthlyhaphazard GOLD, N/A, New York
15 articles 0 photos 177 comments

Favorite Quote:
"There are three rules for writing the novel. Unfortunately, no one knows what they are."~W. Somerset Maugham

Thaks a lot, tigeress3. Most people don't like her, though. She doesn't really like anyone, either.

on Aug. 5 2009 at 3:54 pm
tigeress3 PLATINUM, Dayton, Ohio
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Beau-ti-ful! I like this character!

on Aug. 3 2009 at 10:15 pm
unearthlyhaphazard GOLD, N/A, New York
15 articles 0 photos 177 comments

Favorite Quote:
"There are three rules for writing the novel. Unfortunately, no one knows what they are."~W. Somerset Maugham

Thanks, GlassHeart! Awesome username!

on Aug. 1 2009 at 6:02 pm
GlassHeart SILVER, Black Earth, Wisconsin
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Very good!


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