May 27, 2009
Marriage is not a game. If you think that that's a shame.
When you get married you give up the I's for us and the fuss.
Remember this God Hate Divorce.
I just want this to be enforced.
Make sure you start your marriage before you buy your first carriage.
Marriage is basically when you say i want to be be with you everyday,I'll be O-Kay until I Decay . Marriage doesn't mean 9 kids.
So don't over due, because you can't undo.
The ring is not important if you have true love.
Have true love
You shouldn't love for who they are, NOT because they're a star.
This is Marriage.

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birdie said...
Oct. 29, 2009 at 12:04 pm
you did great especially since your twelve, im 14 and cant write that well, you have serious potential!!!!
Amy L. said...
Sept. 6, 2009 at 3:41 pm
awesome! i really like what you have to say
ClaireAndAaron said...
Jun. 29, 2009 at 11:49 pm
It was good. I like some of your other poems better. But you still have tons of time to perfect your writing strategies. try reading some of mine. i know they're not the best but i wrote them for my AP English class. Hope you like them
Surrealist14 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jun. 15, 2009 at 12:48 am
Its good, but some of the lines dont make sense. Was it written as a rap? It has that sort of beat
Griffinwing said...
Jun. 14, 2009 at 1:47 am
PS giving your age and name on your profile isnt a safe thing, just saying.
Griffinwing said...
Jun. 14, 2009 at 1:44 am
This is what marriage should be, I agree with you. Few grammar errors but besides that nice.
qtepa2ti said...
Jun. 13, 2009 at 8:01 pm
Andrya R. said...
Jun. 13, 2009 at 2:18 am
I enjoyed this. Thanks for the comment on my poem :)
hotbaby said...
Jun. 12, 2009 at 8:54 pm
THank you for all the compliments on my writing and good work!!
Sacred_Surrender said...
Jun. 12, 2009 at 8:05 pm
I do in fact like your poem! You kind of beat around the bush a little bit... And you might want to use a little less rhyming patterns... But it was a very good poem. :] Good job!
Abigail_W said...
Jun. 10, 2009 at 10:49 pm
Haha I like how you comment on your own writing. P.S. Stating that you're a twelve-year-old and that you basically think you're a child prodigy can be unattractive.
hotbaby said...
Jun. 10, 2009 at 9:56 pm
Pretty good. Though I don't think god hates divorce.. I mean when I get married I don't ever want to get divorce (as I assume no one does) but sometimes in some situations divorce is right. Of course I'm not saying you should use divorce as a easy way to get out of a relationship but when you try your hardest to get the relationship to work and the other person just doesn't care anymore then perhaps it is best to get a divorce. Divorce I think should not be used as a easy way out but... (more »)
cmoney1996 said...
Jun. 10, 2009 at 12:26 am
cmoney1996 said...
Jun. 7, 2009 at 10:39 pm
THIS is won of the best poem I've read from somebody your age
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