Darkness

May 26, 2009
By RainWashed PLATINUM, Park City, Utah
RainWashed PLATINUM, Park City, Utah
46 articles 1 photo 88 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Repeat the good and the bad. Do it all again. And pile on the years."


I stalk you,
Watch you,
Follow you.

Where ever you go,
I’m right behind you.
You can feel my eerie presence,
Feel my eyes burrowing into your back.

You’re terrified of me,
Though you cannot see me,
Silently stalking you.

I’m everywhere,
You can’t escape me.
I cloak you like a dream,
I will always surround you.
You can’t escape me.

You run,
You hide,
I still find you.

I will always find you.
I am driven to find you
Hiding.

You shake when I’m near,
You scream when I’m around you.
You start to sprint when I’m coming,
But you can’t escape me.
Even you know that.

I stalk you,
Watch you,
Follow you.



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dreamshaker said...
on Sep. 9 2014 at 8:42 pm
dreamshaker, Clarkston, Michigan
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This is a really impressive poem - you did a downright fantastic job of creating your tone in this one. It actually caught me off guard at first, because I was so unsettled. 
Well done. Seriously. It takes a special knack to pull off darker subjects like this without the piece sounding too overdone. You definitely have that knack - the repetition and the descriptions here were flawless and it made it just creepy enough to reach yout reader, and interesting enough to keep them fully alert. 

on Apr. 27 2011 at 4:37 pm
RainWashed PLATINUM, Park City, Utah
46 articles 1 photo 88 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Repeat the good and the bad. Do it all again. And pile on the years."

I'm sure that's not true. I've read some of your work and you are a very, very strong writer. Job well done!

Richa BRONZE said...
on Jun. 15 2009 at 10:18 pm
Richa BRONZE, Brampton, Ontario, Other
2 articles 0 photos 9 comments
definitely creepy and cool :P

it was really interesting to read this poem..good wrk!

breezer11 GOLD said...
on Jun. 5 2009 at 11:48 pm
breezer11 GOLD, Cinci, Ohio
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I like this. It's a brilliant piece of work where you can very obviously feel the writters passion in every line. I really enjoyed it. Your really good, how come this isn't in the magizine?! Its amazing!

on Jun. 1 2009 at 12:01 am
Inkspired PLATINUM, Whitby, Other
26 articles 0 photos 493 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If one will scoff at the study of language, how, save in terms of language, will one scoff?" - Mario Pei
"I write for the same reason I breathe - because if I didn't, I would die." Isaac Asimov

SO TRUE! You captured the feeling of being alone in the dark perfectly, I love this! Great job!

dCaRtH GOLD said...
on May. 31 2009 at 11:50 pm
dCaRtH GOLD, Warrington, Pennsylvania
14 articles 0 photos 9 comments

Favorite Quote:
Who are you to judge me, I know i'm not perfect and i don't claim to be but before you start pointing fingers make sure your hands are clean first

ok that was really scary but i think your outlook on such an issue is very clever and the poem itself was very strong and bold it enters an issue in which speculation is more ill advised so it was dare i say interesting

riyaliz123 said...
on May. 31 2009 at 11:24 pm
this poem actally make sense to me. most poems don't!!

JasmineG. GOLD said...
on May. 31 2009 at 10:41 pm
JasmineG. GOLD, Lawrence, Massachusetts
11 articles 1 photo 14 comments

Favorite Quote:
"We're in the present not the future. The only thing we can do now is listen to our hearts and pay for it later with the satisfaction of knowing we did something actually worthwhile." -Jasmine Garver

its kinda creepy...but good writing..

~jasmine

on May. 31 2009 at 9:48 pm
hey_itskatelyn PLATINUM, Willis, Texas
21 articles 0 photos 217 comments

Favorite Quote:
“God, of your goodness, give me yourself; you are enough for me, and anything less that I could ask for would not do you full honour. And if I ask anything that is less, I shall always lack something, but in you alone I have everything”

wow totally captivating

on May. 31 2009 at 7:38 pm
*LunaNight* GOLD, Staten Island, New York
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the only way i can decribe how i feel about this poem is that I LOVED IT!!!

on May. 31 2009 at 7:12 pm
Girl_In_Blue GOLD, Chanhassen, Minnesota
10 articles 0 photos 2 comments
my my. That was very... dark. Great job. Keep writing!

on May. 31 2009 at 1:36 pm
project827 GOLD, Portage, Michigan
13 articles 1 photo 91 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Real Revolution Starts At Learning, If You're Not Angry, Then You Are Not Paying Attention" - Tim McIlrath

love this piece. It's very dark, that's probably why I like it. It be cool if you checked out my stuff, it's pretty dark too.

on May. 30 2009 at 11:47 pm
ShernayB. DIAMOND, Southfield, Michigan
62 articles 1 photo 881 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Some things will never change"---Tupac

Wow! This is very good! I love it...It's very eerie and detailed.

If you have time, please check out my work, comment, and rate if you wish! Thanks!

Richa BRONZE said...
on May. 30 2009 at 5:41 am
Richa BRONZE, Brampton, Ontario, Other
2 articles 0 photos 9 comments
wow...that was really good!..so diff from what i have read usually..good work!

Konnar SILVER said...
on May. 29 2009 at 5:33 pm
Konnar SILVER, Qualicum Beach, Other
8 articles 0 photos 5 comments
Wow this is really good, better than most of mine at the very least. Please keep writing!




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