May 25, 2009
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As I sit alone listening to sad songs
I try to figure out all of my wrongs
A drop of tear slides down my cheek
But crying just shows that I'm so weak

I must continue to stand strong
I'll write my own heartbroken song
I'll sing the words of my heart
You and I can't be too far apart

How'd our story come to this end?
It was just starting to extend
And it was so sudden and unexpected
My soul crushed as I was rejected

If only I could rewrite our romance
If only you'd give me just one chance
If only you'd see me for who I am
You'd understand I'm not one of them

I'll still hold on to you for awhile
To prove that I might be worthwhile
I'm not as shallow as they were
I've got nothing to do with her

My heart refuses to let you go
I love you too much, you should know
You tell me that you like me too
But I wonder if it's really true

We're strangers now, nothing more
Leaving my heart hollow and sore
Deprived of the love I have given out
That I shall have to live without

The sun and moon rise and fall
And I throw my empty heart at the wall
Tears stream past my barricade
Because my love for you will not fade.

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ShenelleCrystalx3 said...
Jun. 30, 2010 at 5:44 pm
This is amazing  great job ! keep it up please come and check out my work when you get a chance :) it would mean so much
YS1112 said...
Mar. 31, 2010 at 6:55 pm


Totally Relatiable!

WanderingChild13 said...
Mar. 8, 2010 at 4:12 pm
darkprincess said...
Dec. 12, 2009 at 12:10 am
wow. this was breath taking i read it over and over again. It holds so much meaning to it. Absolutely beautiful. amazing work. one of my favs...
bluemagnet22 said...
Dec. 11, 2009 at 7:10 pm
Wow...I have chills...amazing...u captured so much emotion...u could feel true sincerity behind every word...wonderful flow n ryhme:))
abooga.looga said...
Dec. 6, 2009 at 5:06 pm
memories rush to mind as i read this.
stuckup_giver said...
Oct. 3, 2009 at 9:23 pm
This is so amazing!
You can ryhme which is something I try to do, and fail:)
MiuBlaze This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Sept. 14, 2009 at 8:19 am
Hey, I loved this! Awesome job, really. It's cool how you managed to get every two lines to rhyme. I tried that once, never worked...stopped by the fourth line.
Anyways, hopefully whoever this is about decides to give you a chance!
EdytD said...
Aug. 25, 2009 at 12:52 am
wow, this is fabulous! The narrator's pain is clearly shown in the poem.. I have a friend who is also afraid to get into a relationship, and the problem is, it won't be fun if he/she is too nervous to let it be.
It's a great poem, and the pain of the narrator is shown clearly through the words. I love it!

Thanks for the comments on my poems! :]
one_of_a_kind_girl said...
Jul. 26, 2009 at 7:38 pm
"Tears stream past my barricade
Because my love for you will not fade" those were my favorite lines. The whole poem was very well written. I love that style of writing, where each stanza is full of couplets. I write a lot that exact same way. It's tricky getting the rhythm right AND being able to describe a meaningful passageway to your feelings, and you combined both of those very beautifully. Oh, and thanks for the comment on "What im going throught". i really appreciate it.
His-Bright-Green-Eyes... said...
Jul. 20, 2009 at 11:37 pm
thank you so much for the comment on my "i think of you" poem. :) i love this poem.
SilentQ said...
Jul. 20, 2009 at 6:32 pm
Makes me wonder... nice poem :)
Inkspired said...
Jul. 20, 2009 at 4:23 pm
Beautiful. Very heart-wrenching. You have created a masterpiece, it rhymes well and the rhythm is great.
despurlock This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 13, 2009 at 1:53 pm
"My heart refuses to let you go, I love you too much, you should know." is my favorite line. You did a fantastic job of pouring your heart into this poem, I love it! Thanks for your comment on my poem! I really appreciate it! Please come by and read some more of my work, thanks so much! Keep up the great job!
Erin said...
Jun. 27, 2009 at 1:36 am
love it Carrie :)
good jobbb :)
Rav said...
Jun. 25, 2009 at 7:02 pm
WOW, thats rly good
myluvsong182<3 said...
Jun. 25, 2009 at 5:58 pm
aw man, i read this a few days after mine left me :( :( it totaly relatable...good job :)
caarmmen(: said...
Jun. 25, 2009 at 1:37 am
good job carrie !
wonder who this poem's dedicated to?
gkal213 said...
Jun. 24, 2009 at 5:59 pm
O_O I love rhymes
camille_1441 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jun. 24, 2009 at 4:07 pm
Hey I wanted to thank you for the comment! thanks a million and one =)

haha you know whats funny? I just finished a poem called tears that should be coming out soon! look for it and let me know what you think, I love yours it's so beautiful, heartbreak poems are always awsome because their sincere and from the heart like yours! =)
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