Best Friend, Worst Enemy

I tell you everything
Yet you know nothing
I can choose my words
But you never pry
You never will desert me
And yet you can betray me
I tell you my emotions
But you have none
I cry out to you verbally
But you don’t wrap me in your arms
And yet you are my friend
At the same time my enemy
My strength
And my weakness
No matter what
My dear diary





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tor10jax said...
Sept. 21, 2009 at 4:11 pm
I really like this poem, especially the ending. The only word I'd get rid of or change is "verbally" besides that, great job!
Keep writing!
 
sallyloco said...
Jun. 17, 2009 at 11:19 pm
Wow the ending caught me by surprise but i loved it!
 
pinksage33 said...
Jun. 12, 2009 at 8:17 pm
great poem!!!
 
amyxu said...
Jun. 4, 2009 at 7:04 pm
I loved it. A few tips, though: in the line "I cry out verbally" the word "verbally" can be removed, because it is redundant. If someone "cries out" it's going to be verbal. Also, the comparison "I can choose my words but you never pry" did not seem different enough to contrast. Perhaps change "I can choose my words" to something more friend-specific...like "I can tell you everything." Anyway, good job!
 
lovehate29 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jun. 4, 2009 at 5:26 pm
Oh goodness! This is the first time I read a poem once, and totally got the full meaning of. I really like that about your piece. Great job!
 
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