May 19, 2009
By Miss_May1312 BRONZE, Lincoln, Nebraska
Miss_May1312 BRONZE, Lincoln, Nebraska
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Tell me why I cry at night
Tell me why nothing is right
Do you even understand
How sad I am?
I wish so bad to be ok
But nothing seems to make me that way
So confused
And deeply bruised
Why am I still crying
Why am I still lying
Why does life not make sense
I just want it to for once
Why should I stay strong
If everything I do is constantly wrong
Why, can’t you just answer the simple question

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tor10jax GOLD said...
on Aug. 20 2009 at 8:56 pm
tor10jax GOLD, Livingston, New Jersey
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I liked how this poem asked all those questions and gave a lot of personality to the naarator. More could've been added and I think it needed more question marks but besides for that great job!

Keep writing!

amyxu said...
on Jun. 30 2009 at 6:29 pm
Hey I was browsing Teen Ink and I came across you poem. Wow, I really liked the rhythm! I appreciate it when poets stay with their chosen meter and don't wander off. Nice work. There was one line I thought could be a little stronger: "Why does life not make sense/I just want it to for once." Those words are hard to rhyme, but I'm sure you could think of something (or else switch out one of them for something else). Also, instead of "why does life NOT make sense" you could say "why does life make NO sense." It's just easier to read that way. But anyway, I liked your poem a lot! Keep writing!


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