May 18, 2009
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Broken are those who fell
longing for love to know
peace and tranquility shattered
fear and shadows gathered

Broken are those who loved
fearing deception and lies
those days once lived now gone
hollow hearts sining with grief

Forever to be lost
only time to remember
fallen and forgotten in life
memories shattered in death

That which once held now lost
yesterday's joys joys turned today to sorrow
the laughs and dreams left behind
to be filled by my hollow thoughts and silent screams

You see smiles and I know hurt
these masks we wear are only thoughts we share
the truth is hidden and lies forbidden
only our hearts remain to tell our stories again

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imrighthereyouknow said...
Feb. 2, 2011 at 4:47 pm
I've commented on a lot of people's poems, and I always tell people I like it. But this poem... I just love it. I love the phrasing, and the way you showed me a broken heart not by saying it plainly, but through... I don't know what to call it. Through beautiful, sophisticated, emotional writing--the kind that makes you think and read it again.
imrighthereyouknow replied...
Feb. 2, 2011 at 4:49 pm

btw! I tagged it as a favorite.

PS Can you comment on some of my stuff?

EmC725 said...
Jan. 26, 2010 at 4:14 pm
great job! love the emotion! one thing to watch for--as I read your poems, I am noticing that you use certain words a lot to describe things. Try to vary your vocabulary a little more. This poem is very good!
Shannon_ replied...
Jan. 26, 2010 at 4:19 pm
ok thanks im always up for opinions and help for my work... thanks
ShernayB. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 19, 2010 at 3:12 pm
This is very deep. I love the first two stanzas. It draws a lot of attention into your piece. Good job. Keep writing.
Jatavion said...
Jan. 15, 2010 at 8:48 pm
I really felt that your last stanza was very powerful and easily relatable. For me at least, the last stanza made this poem. Great job, 5 stars
Jake G. said...
Nov. 19, 2009 at 1:51 pm
Good poem, very deep, I like it. Maybe add something about the happiness of the relationship for comparrison? idk any ways it was good
amberys11 said...
Aug. 6, 2009 at 6:20 pm
nice deep
Whitney said...
May 23, 2009 at 8:50 pm
Great poem. Keep writing.
MariaMarie This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
May 23, 2009 at 7:08 pm
It's good, don't like the last line so much.. But i love the way u word it, the reasoning behind it. Cool.
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