Recovering

May 16, 2009
By ShernayB. DIAMOND, Southfield, Michigan
ShernayB. DIAMOND, Southfield, Michigan
62 articles 1 photo 881 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Some things will never change"---Tupac


She lays there; on the cold, bare floor
Gasping for air, for she has lost her breath.
Crying are her eyes as she can take
no more
Of the lies and the pain that portrays her to near death.
Her eyes flash in horror as she recognizes
Faces, memories, voices of her true love.
Her body trembles as she agonizes
Hiding the scares with a glove.
As time moves on, so does she
Forgetting about the agony;memories
fading slow
Restraining not to dispose the key
Holding the fate to distant woes
This time her lids open; eyes crystal clear
No hint of hurt and pain; erased
completely of fear


The author's comments:
This poem I wrote is a Shakespearean sonnet. It follows the structure...14 lined poem..rhyme scheme: abab cdcd efef gg...It also includes a subject with a conclusion. Hope you like it!

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on Sep. 1 2010 at 9:58 pm
ShernayB. DIAMOND, Southfield, Michigan
62 articles 1 photo 881 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Some things will never change"---Tupac


its crazy hard if you don't have your thoughts together for it. 

but thanks so much! <3:)


on Sep. 1 2010 at 9:55 pm
Alcanno DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
59 articles 0 photos 670 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you love life, don't waste time, for time is what life is
made up of."

-- Bruce Lee

I love how this flows - its easy and smooth, even though you wrote it as a Shakespearean sonnet. It must have been crazy hard to do, but you mastered it beautifully! Great job!

on Apr. 19 2010 at 7:16 pm
ZebraWithoutStripes ELITE, Blue Springs, Missouri
102 articles 8 photos 85 comments

Favorite Quote:
To make a difference in the world, you have to be different from the world.

i like this! it's really well written. and though it's sad i love the end. :)

(thanks for checking out my work)


Nkeeyah BRONZE said...
on Apr. 15 2010 at 1:16 pm
Nkeeyah BRONZE, Los Angeles, California
3 articles 0 photos 10 comments

Favorite Quote:
Only reason someone tells you that your dream is stupid is b/c they don't have any dreams of their own.

I really like this! You did an amazing job

on Apr. 14 2010 at 2:21 pm
ShernayB. DIAMOND, Southfield, Michigan
62 articles 1 photo 881 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Some things will never change"---Tupac

Thank you!

i_luv_music said...
on Apr. 13 2010 at 12:48 pm

your work is amazing...even though it is sad in the beginning there is always hope in the end.

good job!


on Apr. 12 2010 at 7:17 am
ShernayB. DIAMOND, Southfield, Michigan
62 articles 1 photo 881 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Some things will never change"---Tupac

Awww thanks so much!

on Apr. 12 2010 at 5:59 am
Dunkelheitstieg BRONZE, Baldwin, Florida
4 articles 0 photos 92 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The poet ranks far below the painter in the representation of visible things, and far below the musician in that of invisible things. Why does the eye see a thing more clearly in dreams than the imagination when awake?,"Leonardo da Vinci.

I love this poem and i'm making it one of my fav.'s!

on Apr. 7 2010 at 12:37 pm
RonCame1993 SILVER, Farmington Hills, Michigan
9 articles 3 photos 14 comments

Favorite Quote:
If I'm weird, what's normal?
Gullible isn't in the dictionary... (sad face)

It's good. I like it alot. =D

on Apr. 6 2010 at 12:52 pm
ShernayB. DIAMOND, Southfield, Michigan
62 articles 1 photo 881 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Some things will never change"---Tupac

Thanks so much!

on Apr. 5 2010 at 4:57 pm
shelterisland GOLD, Montclair, New Jersey
14 articles 0 photos 175 comments

Favorite Quote:
-Biting's excellent. It's like kissing only there's a winner."-Doctor Who, The Tardis

i like this a lot! keep writing!

on Mar. 6 2010 at 2:08 pm
Jilybeanrb SILVER, Prentiss, Mississippi
6 articles 0 photos 32 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Margo was not a miracle. She was not an adventure. She was not a fine and precious thing. She was a girl." ~Paper Towns

Sonnets are a good challenge :) You did a really great job.

on Feb. 11 2010 at 8:57 am
iScareBear GOLD, Macomb, Michigan
16 articles 0 photos 4 comments

Favorite Quote:
I am more than i appear...

Dude, this is really good... like... it brings back memories for me even... and thank you for commenting on my work...

on Jan. 31 2010 at 6:15 pm
literaryaddict PLATINUM, Albuquerque, New Mexico
23 articles 3 photos 157 comments

Favorite Quote:
"We're almost there and no where near it. All that matters is that we're going." Lorelai Gilmore, Gilmore Girls
"The whole theory of modern education is radically unsound." Lady Bracknell, The Importance of Being Earnest, Oscar Wilde

you are such a good writer too. i liked this poem a lot!

Shannon_ GOLD said...
on Jan. 25 2010 at 11:54 am
Shannon_ GOLD, Atlanta, Georgia
12 articles 0 photos 19 comments

Favorite Quote:
For we are the children of The Lost Generation and Truth is blind.

Really good i like it! You have inspired me to write one of my own. ( thanks for the comment on my poetry)

BoJammin GOLD said...
on Jan. 20 2010 at 4:07 pm
BoJammin GOLD, Niantic, Connecticut
12 articles 0 photos 7 comments

Favorite Quote:
"A ship is safe in a harbour, but that is not where a ship is meant to stay"

this is just awesome. I love Shakespeare, and I'm impressed that you took his format and wrote something this good. Keep it up.

(thanks for the comments, by the way)

on Jan. 11 2010 at 8:18 pm
bookhugger14 SILVER, Delta, Ohio
7 articles 1 photo 32 comments
what a wonderful poem! totally understood what you were trying to portray and it was very much a sonnet! excellent work :)

on Jan. 2 2010 at 8:58 am
Prathap PLATINUM, Bangalore, Other
23 articles 0 photos 22 comments

Favorite Quote:
All's fair in love and war. Everyone loves everyone else, and the whole world is at war. So anything that you do is fair... break a girl's heart and tell me that, I'll believe you.

Lovely one!! have to hand it to you... I can totally relate to what you are writing here!! Looking forward to reading more from you! :)

on Dec. 10 2009 at 10:36 am
btammychu BRONZE, Roslyn, New York
4 articles 0 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
"When snow melts what does it turn into?" people would say water but it turns into Spring!!

That was really good! It totally captivates me

Brndi_Marie said...
on Dec. 8 2009 at 12:44 pm
this is amazing i love it!!!




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