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Already Gone

Standing there, watching him in line
Waiting patiently to get on the plane
There he stands tall and proud
With his boots on, his big bag weighing him down
His shirt carefully tucked in

His head slowly turns
The line slowly moves on step closer
He looks at me, his only daughter
As a tear fills my eyes, my face bright red
There daddy stands, tall and proud

Still looking at me
A tear rolls down his cheek
Violently hitting the ground and shatters
Mommy can no longer hold onto my hand
I run towards daddy as he steps one step closer

With tears burning my eyes
I’m screaming inside
I trip and fall and I scrape my knee
I jump up my face still red
I run towards daddy faster

I jump on him with a flying hug
Tightly holding onto his neck
Begging him “Don’t go daddy! Please don’t go!!”
His face redder than my own
Bullets of tears fall from his face

Screaming until t hey reach their destination
Shattering onto the ground
Daddy kisses my cheek
I continue to sob
I rest my head onto his shoulder

As he cradles me in his arms
I sill sob, my eyes growing heavy
Daddy slowly and gently takes me back
Back to mommy, as she wraps her arms around us both
She carefully grabs me, holding me close

My eyes halfway open
I watch daddy march back to place
Right before he left me in mommy’s arms
He whispered “I love you hunnie, don’t forget that”
One more tear rolls down my face

Soaking mommy’s shirt
Daddy turns around, blows me a kiss
And with the blink of my eye
He is already gone



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sallyloco said...
Jun. 23, 2009 at 6:29 pm
okay i'm crying this poem is so sad! But it was very beautiful.
 
BrittanyB said...
May 26, 2009 at 4:34 pm
Thank you all for the comments and the support!!

I know that I've gone and read most of yalls poetry and work, and I've commented on atleast one.

but I just wanted to thank you all once more!
 
lovehate29 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
May 23, 2009 at 2:38 am
This poem was so sweet...it literally brought tears to my eyes...as I could relate to something like this. Keep up the good work, you have incredible talent!! :))
 
Dax533 said...
May 23, 2009 at 12:19 am
Same as what Jaquie. Only cookie dough ice cream:), and ot crying I dont ever cy even if I want to.:(
 
Kristi D. said...
May 22, 2009 at 8:29 pm
This is simply amazing. As I was reading it I could picture the scene in my head. This really is inspirational. Keep up the good work.
 
Tony S. said...
May 22, 2009 at 7:06 pm
Great Poem brought back memories
 
LitDiva said...
May 22, 2009 at 6:40 pm
I like that you didn't come right out and say he was being deployed... it was just implied. You also evoke a lot of emotion from your readers. Well done!
 
pinksage33 said...
May 22, 2009 at 4:47 pm
Amazing!!! very emotinal.
 
Jaquie This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
May 22, 2009 at 11:06 am
That was incredibly depressing... But in a good I want to bawl my eyes out while clutching desperately to a carton of rocky-road ice-cream. Your style is very nice, and I loved the tear/bullet analogy. Keep writing.
God bless,
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