First Kiss MAG

May 18, 2009
By LittlestBird GOLD, North Bay, Other
LittlestBird GOLD, North Bay, Other
19 articles 0 photos 15 comments

Run-down apartments
and broken-down dreams
you found me
in the deep november flash-freeze
of my mind

let go
of waiting cars
i fled from your nighttime
in search of my own.

beating pulse
how it drove me
for sixteen long years
and who could've known
i'd end up at your door

for my headlights
grew dim
but the storm wore on
and the fireworks set off
from your dingy back porch
couldn't guide me home

so i'll keep searching.



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on Aug. 7 2013 at 10:28 am
jfsdifdisofnsdklvn BRONZE, Hanahan, South Carolina
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I love the language and imagery you used. You kept it subtle, not in your face romance, and that's what is so refreshing about this piece. I like how you kept it mysterious, but you still weren't afraid to peek out behind every corner. The "For my headlights..." stanza is beautiful, especially how, for the last line, you pulled the whole piece together. Great job. :)

<3|tatianaa. said...
on Feb. 10 2010 at 9:24 am
Wow.! thisz isz some amazinq poetry. keep up the qood work and dnt ever stop writinq.

CherryBabe said...
on Feb. 9 2010 at 7:41 pm
CherryBabe, Tupelo, Mississippi
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Favorite Quote:
Fear is the dumbest thing we’ve ever created in our mind, it’s so stupid, it stands in the way of everything and accomplishes nothing.

Wow, sums up teenage romance pretty well. Love the vivid descriptions

on Feb. 1 2010 at 11:46 am
Ember013 BRONZE, Wichita Falls, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"You can only live once, make the best of it because the song at your funeral might not be the one you want played!"[;

Great poem! Keep up the amazing work.(: I hope you check out some of my poems also. I'd greatly appreciate it.(: Thanks. && Keep writing!

on Jan. 30 2010 at 7:58 pm
LuLu95 PLATINUM, Denver, Colorado
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Favorite Quote:
"Oooh! Dark matter, we better bring a flashlight!"

This poem is really great, it uses great language, and it's not too obvious, it's kind of mysterious, but you can still tell what's going on, perfect

on Jan. 29 2010 at 10:34 pm
BreeLynne27 GOLD, Carmel, Indiana
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this is a really pretty poem. you have lots of talent so keep writing!!

on Jan. 29 2010 at 9:06 am
sMiLeY13 SILVER, Grand Junction, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
My favortie quote is------- "Hey whats up" and also "facil" which means easy in spanish

THIS IS AN AWSOME POEM


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