Love

May 13, 2009
By Birder SILVER, Waterboro, Maine
Birder SILVER, Waterboro, Maine
6 articles 22 photos 104 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Do unto others as you would have them do unto you, unless they do unto you first, then open a can of unto on to them."

"Obey the ninja."

"What's that? And why does it say snickle tickle?"


Love, love
It repeats in my mind like a heartbeat
Only when you die it never stops
It’s serene, yet bewildering
And when you try to put it aside
It puts aside you
It is infinity, yet different
But the same
And somehow more
You feel like no one will ever feel that way
And it’s true
Caring, Liking, Confusion, Thought
That is love
There’s that word again
Love, love
Your heartbeat, my heartbeat, our heartbeat
People draw hearts to indicate love
But hearts are organs pumping blood through your body
And I know you’re better than that
Love is in the soul
Like a guitar, every time you discover a new song
You find harmony, strength, power, freeing of the mind
Altogether in a soul of love
Barely contained by a fragment of sanity
But who needs sanity
Go wild
Enchant everyone by making hope for love
Soul not heart
Peace, calm, all yet more into one simple word
LOVE


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Birder SILVER said...
on Oct. 20 2011 at 4:57 pm
Birder SILVER, Waterboro, Maine
6 articles 22 photos 104 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Do unto others as you would have them do unto you, unless they do unto you first, then open a can of unto on to them."

"Obey the ninja."

"What's that? And why does it say snickle tickle?"

Just like to say, I wrote this when I was 8-10. :P

Birder SILVER said...
on Oct. 8 2010 at 6:19 am
Birder SILVER, Waterboro, Maine
6 articles 22 photos 104 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Do unto others as you would have them do unto you, unless they do unto you first, then open a can of unto on to them."

"Obey the ninja."

"What's that? And why does it say snickle tickle?"

Ummmmm....I'm guessing you accidently copied and pasted the poem twice :/ But, it is a very touching nice poem. I think it's very beautiful.   C;

on Oct. 7 2010 at 9:54 pm
elmosoreo SILVER, Paducah, Kentucky
8 articles 2 photos 37 comments

Favorite Quote:
Oftentimes we say goodbye to the person we love without wanting to. Though that doesn’t mean that we've stopped loving them or we've stopped to care. Sometimes goodbye is a painful way to say I love you....

I love this poem ^.^ It brought to mind my favorite quote Ima share it with you cuz Im that cool lol -->

"Love is a temporary madness. It erupts like an earthquake and then subsides. And when it subsides you have to make a decision. You have to work out whether your roots have become so entwined together that it is inconceivable that you should ever part. Because this is what love is. Love is not breathlessness, it is not excitement, it is not the promulgation of promises of eternal passion. That is just being "in love" which any of us can convince ourselves we are. Love itself is what is left over when being in love has burned away, and this is both an art and a fortunate accident. Your mother and I had it, we had roots that grew towards each other underground, and when all the pretty blossom had fall...en from our branches we found that we were one tree and not two."
-St. Augustine


on Oct. 5 2010 at 2:23 pm
apocalyptigirl BRONZE, Staunton, Virginia
4 articles 2 photos 285 comments

Favorite Quote:
"DON'T PANIC." ~from The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy by Douglas Adams

Smiley face. The Good: Loved the antithesis (contrast) between body and soul, soul and heart, sanity/wild, serene/confusing, put it aside/puts aside you (that was my favorite part btw). The fixable: Didn't like all the "yet"s. The Other: me encanta esta poema. :)

on Aug. 1 2010 at 8:40 pm
Supernova7 GOLD, Redford, Texas
16 articles 6 photos 394 comments

Favorite Quote:
Let me cry my tears let me live in sorrow as long as you promise to be with me tomorrow
By Me:)

It was awesome five stars:)

on Aug. 1 2010 at 8:32 pm
Just.A.Dream SILVER, Lake Geneva, Wisconsin
7 articles 0 photos 431 comments

Favorite Quote:
Part of the J7X team. :)

It had an excellent beat to it! I loved the diction. :) And the poem was altogether nicely written. Good job!

on Aug. 1 2010 at 1:11 pm
OfficialApprover PLATINUM, Orefield, Pennsylvania
48 articles 0 photos 1754 comments

Favorite Quote:
Grab life by the balls. -Slobberknocker
We cannot change the cards we're dealt just how we play the hand
Experience is what you get when you didn't get what you wanted
It's pretty easy to be smart when you're parroting smart people
-Randy Pausch

This was beautiful, excellent use of words, very flowing and rhythmic. Great imagery and examples. 

on Aug. 1 2010 at 9:40 am
SarClark BRONZE, NC, Connecticut
2 articles 0 photos 534 comments

Parts of it were a bit confusing, for example 'It puts aside you', and 'but hearts are organs pumping blood through your body' like, okay, got it, but this is a poem.

Annnyway, moving on, I actually really did think this was a really good poem and the word choice was absolutely stunning. 'Barely contained by a fragment of sanity' was my favorite line. Nicely done!


on Jul. 15 2010 at 8:26 am
TheHandThatWieldsThePen SILVER, Shapleigh, Maine
5 articles 0 photos 74 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Let's waste time
chasing cars
around our heads."
--Chasing Cars by Snow Patrol

"I do believe it's true
there are roads left in both of our shoes
if the silence take you then I hope it takes me too."
--Soul Meets Body by Death Cab For Cutie

This is really good!  I love how portray love in all the complexity that it really is!!!

;-)


on Jul. 14 2010 at 3:45 pm
midnightsilence PLATINUM, Hilltowns, Massachusetts
25 articles 0 photos 12 comments

Favorite Quote:
There are consequences for your actions

absolutely beautiful.... a deep meaning that it eye opening.  This is, definately special.  Wow.  Very nice!

Birder SILVER said...
on Jul. 13 2010 at 8:46 am
Birder SILVER, Waterboro, Maine
6 articles 22 photos 104 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Do unto others as you would have them do unto you, unless they do unto you first, then open a can of unto on to them."

"Obey the ninja."

"What's that? And why does it say snickle tickle?"

Thanks for the comment and complement!

on Jul. 13 2010 at 8:12 am
HeatherBee BRONZE, I Live In, Texas
1 article 0 photos 1985 comments

Favorite Quote:
Go on and try to tear me down. I will be rising from the ground, like a skyscraper

Love is louder than the pressure to be perfect

awwww :))) that made me smile!!!! that was really good ^^ nice workk

Birder SILVER said...
on Jul. 13 2010 at 7:03 am
Birder SILVER, Waterboro, Maine
6 articles 22 photos 104 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Do unto others as you would have them do unto you, unless they do unto you first, then open a can of unto on to them."

"Obey the ninja."

"What's that? And why does it say snickle tickle?"

Thanks, that really means alot!

on Jul. 12 2010 at 3:30 pm
sleeplessdreamer PLATINUM, Raleigh, North Carolina
30 articles 0 photos 332 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I have always wanted to write in such a way that people say, 'I have always thought that but never found the words for it.'" -anonymous

I ABSOLUTELY love this... (no pun intended). To be honest, when I first opened it I was expecting it to be some fluffly "love" poem like a lot of them are. But you blew me away. This is beautiful!

on Jul. 12 2010 at 11:07 am
Inherinerd GOLD, Ashland, Ohio
16 articles 9 photos 302 comments

Favorite Quote:
A word to the wise ain't nessecary it's the stupid ones that need the advise

wow this is amazing!!!! I suck at poetry!!! really jealous!!

Birder SILVER said...
on Mar. 1 2010 at 8:23 am
Birder SILVER, Waterboro, Maine
6 articles 22 photos 104 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Do unto others as you would have them do unto you, unless they do unto you first, then open a can of unto on to them."

"Obey the ninja."

"What's that? And why does it say snickle tickle?"

Thank You all for the wonderful feed back on my work! It really means alot.

on Nov. 2 2009 at 6:12 pm
LoveLikeWoe DIAMOND, LeSueur, MN, Minnesota
54 articles 2 photos 748 comments

Favorite Quote:
Whoever laughs first has the sickest mind.

Oh my god. This is so good i think my eyes are bugging out of my head!!! O.O or close at least... YOU ARE AMAZING! keep up the good work! better yet the most amazing work EVA!

Joanna said...
on Jul. 1 2009 at 1:59 pm
Joanna, St. Catharines, Other
0 articles 0 photos 165 comments
Nicely done. I like your use of similes and imagery.

I'd suggest that you try to seperate the lines into verses, instead of having it all just one big peice. It's a small detail, but I think the right configuration of lines can make a huge difference.

on Jun. 8 2009 at 7:40 pm
TheHandThatWieldsThePen SILVER, Shapleigh, Maine
5 articles 0 photos 74 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Let's waste time
chasing cars
around our heads."
--Chasing Cars by Snow Patrol

"I do believe it's true
there are roads left in both of our shoes
if the silence take you then I hope it takes me too."
--Soul Meets Body by Death Cab For Cutie

OOH la la this is really an amazing piece, but you have to wonder, who's the special somebody?

on Jun. 2 2009 at 6:44 pm
TheHandThatWieldsThePen SILVER, Shapleigh, Maine
5 articles 0 photos 74 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Let's waste time
chasing cars
around our heads."
--Chasing Cars by Snow Patrol

"I do believe it's true
there are roads left in both of our shoes
if the silence take you then I hope it takes me too."
--Soul Meets Body by Death Cab For Cutie

U R Amazing! There is something in your writing that says Im younger than you think. If thats true, than you write wonderfully for your age! Bravo!


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