Teen

May 1, 2009
By hxcRocker DIAMOND, Haiku, Hawaii
hxcRocker DIAMOND, Haiku, Hawaii
59 articles 2 photos 88 comments

I attack what i cannot see
Bleed out of what is not me
Fight with all my might
Even though not an enemy is in sight



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on Apr. 4 2010 at 3:23 pm
Breebear BRONZE, Lake Forest, California
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haha i love how alot of your poems are so short and to the point

on Mar. 29 2010 at 12:59 am
amicrazyorisitjusteveryoneelse PLATINUM, Kula, Hawaii
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Favorite Quote:
"Everything you dream is real and everything real is a dream"

maybe changing the line even though not an enemy is in sight to even though there is no enemy in sight would be better than the original   but other than that it's a good poem   captures the reality of being a teenager

on Aug. 31 2009 at 10:22 pm
ShernayB. DIAMOND, Southfield, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
"Some things will never change"---Tupac

This is pretty good. You are so talented.

on May. 8 2009 at 1:27 am
blackamethyst GOLD, Centerville, Ohio
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amazing

on May. 8 2009 at 1:11 am
Inkspired PLATINUM, Whitby, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"If one will scoff at the study of language, how, save in terms of language, will one scoff?" - Mario Pei
"I write for the same reason I breathe - because if I didn't, I would die." Isaac Asimov

I love this poem, it's so short and it has a lot behind the actual words, you can find whatever meaning in it! I like the way you describe teens, too. AMAZING!!

on May. 7 2009 at 10:47 pm
banana PLATINUM, Johnston, Iowa
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the thoughts behind this are good, but working on the rhythm and flow could make it much stronger!

on May. 7 2009 at 10:42 pm
ImDumbStruck DIAMOND, Springfield, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
"If at first you don't succeed, destroy any evidence."

this is kewl

on May. 7 2009 at 9:57 pm
-xlimitless239x- GOLD, Vanceboro, North Carolina
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it's an okay poem. check out mines.


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